Talk:Silly Boy Blue/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:50, 6 April 2022 (UTC)

Here is another review for you! --K. Peake 09:50, 6 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks for reviewing Kyle. I'll be able to get to this on Sunday probably. I have a busy next few days. Cheers friend :-) – zmbro (talk) (cont) 02:30, 8 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Good news there, especially with Sunday being my only remaining day off work! --K. Peake 06:14, 8 April 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Infobox looks good!
 * Pipe demoed to Demo (music)
 * "with a new lyric and arrangement" → "with new lyrics"
 * Both done


 * "has appeared on compilations." → "has appeared on releases."
 * Feel like compilations is more specific and 'releases' is too generic. Added link here. – zmbro (talk) (cont) 03:08, 11 April 2022 (UTC)


 * "and during two of his" → "and during his respective"
 * Pipe acoustically to Acoustic music
 * Both done


 * "and was included on" → "and was included on the compilation album" with the wikilink
 * See above


 * "while Bowie revisited Tibetan themes" → "whereas Bowie revisited the Tibetan themes"
 * "performed this arrangement in New York in" → "performed this version at New York's Carnegie Hall in" with the wikilink
 * "saw official release" → "saw an official release"
 * Above three done

Recording and composition

 * Retitle to Background and composition
 * First para looks good!
 * Wikilink Tibet on the quote box
 * "A year later, he" → "In 1966, Bowie" per this being a new para
 * Wikilink Decca Studios
 * Pipe key to Key (music)
 * "Bowie rewrote its lyrics" → "Bowie rewrote the lyrics"
 * Wikilink cello
 * "on backing vocals." → "on her vocals."
 * Pipe baseline to Bassline
 * Mention the release year of the version of Bob Dylan's recording
 * All done


 * Are you sure that "resolving" is the appropriate term here?
 * How about 'ending'? – zmbro (talk) (cont) 03:08, 11 April 2022 (UTC)

Release and aftermath

 * "Silly Boy Blue" is sequenced as the second track, so alter this error appropriately
 * Well that's extra embarrassing, fixed – zmbro (talk) (cont) 03:08, 11 April 2022 (UTC)


 * "considered it one of" → "considered the track one of"
 * "He ultimately felt" → "Unterberger ultimately felt"
 * "again at London's Decca Studios," → "again at Decca Studios," per the studio's location already having been mentioned
 * Add the release year of "Waiting for the Man"
 * Pipe acoustic to Acoustic music
 * Pipe mime to Mime artist
 * "and 13 May 1968." → "and 13 May 1968, respectively."
 * All done

Toy version

 * "other tracks Bowie wrote" → "other tracks he wrote" to avoid overusage of Bowie
 * "so to prevent" → "as so to prevent"
 * "this new version is" → "the new version is"
 * "of "Silly Boy Blue" at the" → "of "Silly Boy Blue" for the" to avoid overusage of at
 * "arguing that its" → "arguing that a"
 * All done

Personnel

 * Any note(s) that could be added from the unknown musicians?
 * Unfortunately nope. Many of the session musicians from this period were undocumented. – zmbro (talk) (cont) 03:08, 11 April 2022 (UTC)

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 11:05, 6 April 2022 (UTC)
 * All set. Sorry almost completely forgot about this. Thanks again Kyle. – zmbro (talk) (cont) 03:08, 11 April 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, I was thinking yesterday where was your response but I am very glad to see it by now! --K. Peake 06:31, 11 April 2022 (UTC)