Talk:Sinners Never Sleep/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 23:06, 12 September 2021 (UTC)

I can take a look at this! Because I am now teaching full-time, it may take a few days to complete this review in its entirety. —  Ghost River  23:06, 12 September 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lede

 * No comma needed after "3 October 2011"
 * "extended play" can be lowercase

Background and writing

 * WL first instance of "You me at Six"
 * "UK albums chart" "UK Albums Chart" with the WL
 * "Following numerous tours, tension within the band was rising as the members became sick of one another." "Extensive touring led to tensions within the band, as the members became sick of one another."
 * No comma needed after "vocalist Josh Franceschi"
 * Comma needed after "writing new songs together"
 * Comma needed after "and halt their recording plans"

Pre-production and initial tracking

 * "Their label asked where they wanted to record it before proposing a secluded forest location. Franceschi said if the band members lived within a small, sparsely populated area, they would "probably end up killing each other" because they were social people." "Their label initially suggested a secluded forest location, a proposal that the extroverted band rejected, with Franceschi saying that they would "probably end up killing each other" if they could not interact with other people."
 * WL first instance of Los Angeles, California, and of Hollywood
 * "Richardson told the band what he considered to be good and bad; he and the band brainstormed ways to improve some of the songs." "Richardson delivered both positive and negative critique of what he heard, and he and the band brainstormed methods of improvement for some of the songs."
 * Comma after "Richardson produced the album"
 * "trigger the drums" "trigger the drum kit" for subject/verb agreement

Franceschi's panic attack and later recording

 * Add reference immediately after direct quote per WP:INTEGRITY
 * "Following this, he tweeted he saw Noel Gallagher in the same studio and was unaware he just leaked the news a former Oasis member was recording a solo album." "Following this, Franceschi learned that his tweet about seeing Noel Gallagher in the studio had accidentally leaked the news that a former Oasis member was recording a solo album."
 * "having a panic attack, being taken to hospital." "having a panic attack that resulted in his hospitalization"
 * "It costed" "It cost"
 * "two-to-three weeks" "two to three weeks"
 * "brought in Skyes" "brought in Sykes"
 * Comma after "originally mixed by Andy Wallace"

Overview

 * "and exchange it" "exchanging it"
 * "and integrate elements" "and integrating elements"
 * Replace the paraphrasing on the first sentence of the second paragraph with the direct quote from the Rock Sound interview

Songs

 * Link "football" to association football, to distinguish it from gridiron football
 * It is reminiscent of some of the songs on Hold Me Down. How so?
 * "Franceschi called "No One Does It Better" and "Crash" are "pretty chilled-out" and are in similar style"
 * WL orgasm
 * ""Reckless" was originally titled" ""Reckless" went through a series of name changes throughout its development. It was originally titled"

Release

 * "the song was released as an EP" "the song was released as an extended play (EP)"
 * "It was accompanied with the" "It was accompanied by the"

Touring

 * "and went on a co-headlining Australian tour" "followed by a co-headlining Australian tour"
 * "did some in-store performances and signing events" "did a series of in-store performances and signing events"
 * What happened with The Dangerous Summer to make that tour fall through?
 * Did a quick google and couldn't find anything about it. Yeepsi (talk) 13:33, 14 September 2021 (UTC)

Reception

 * Most of this section revolves around reviewers' reactions to the change in genre; this should be mentioned somewhere directly in prose, outside of the quotes

Chart performance

 * Sinners Never Sleep reached number one on the UK midweek album chart, before falling to number three after selling 27,000 copies. Unclear sentence; I'm not sure when the selling 27,000 copies happened
 * The last sentence has little to do with charts and should be in a separate section called "Accolades"; you should also mention what the end result was of these nominations

Track listing

 * Good

Personnel

 * Pipe "producer" to Record producer, "engineer" to Audio engineer, "mixing" to Audio mixing (recorded music), and "mastering" to Mastering (audio)

Charts and certifications

 * The three-column look appears squashed; I'd prefer seeing the weekly and year-end charts as a two-column chart, and certifications down below in a space to itself

General comments

 * Two photos, both of which are properly licensed and are relevant
 * Per MOS:CAPTION, there should not be a period in the caption of the second photo, as it is only a sentence fragment.
 * No stability concerns in the revision history
 * Earwig score looks good at 20.0%, all due to proper nouns and attributed direct quotes

Putting on hold to allow nominator to address comments. Ping me if there are any questions. —  Ghost River  13:04, 14 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Made the changes. Yeepsi (talk) 13:33, 14 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Looks good now, happy to pass! —  Ghost River  17:06, 14 September 2021 (UTC)