Talk:Ski flying/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MPJ-DK (talk · contribs) 03:42, 1 March 2016 (UTC)

Just a heads up, as part of the GA Cup I am going to start to review this article now. I will provide running updates and then indicate when I have been through the entire article.  MPJ  -US 03:42, 1 March 2016 (UTC)

Manual of Style

 * Lead is too short of an article of this size, per WP:LEAD it should be 3-4 paragraphs long to properly summarize the major aspects of the article
 * Have now tried to expand it to three paragraphs by adding key years for when the six venues opened, plus some mentions about the danger aspect and changes in technique. I also tacked on some attendance figures at the two most prolific venues today, but I'm unsure as to whether that fourth paragraph could be puffed up just a little bit more... Mac Dreamstate (talk) 03:13, 2 March 2016 (UTC)
 * The following links go to Disambiguation pages and not a specific article: Werner Schuster, Mike Holland
 * ✅. Mac Dreamstate (talk) 18:09, 1 March 2016 (UTC)
 * According to Manual of Style (numbers), all measurements and their units must have "& nbsp;" (no space) between then
 * Does "& nbsp;" have to be placed within all conversion templates, or only for the instances where they are not used? Mac Dreamstate (talk) 18:09, 1 March 2016 (UTC)
 * I believe the conversion templates are excluded from this, only where it is in plain text.
 * ✅. Mac Dreamstate (talk) 22:37, 1 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Manual of Style (headings) - Headings should not start with "the"
 * Must it be "Event" on its own? I tried to think of a more descriptive title, but I ran out of ideas. Mac Dreamstate (talk) 18:24, 1 March 2016 (UTC)
 * "Events"? or "Event details"? Either would work for me
 * ✅ and changed to "Event details". Mac Dreamstate (talk) 22:44, 1 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Headings should not repeat the title of the article if at all possible.
 * I've now reduced the amount of this, but for "Ski flying" and "Ski flying", the full names of each contest are quite important. Could they be left as exceptions? Mac Dreamstate (talk) 18:24, 1 March 2016 (UTC)
 * For those two I am okay with the header being unchanged
 * There are a number of American and British English spelling differences, please make the article consistent one way or the other, examples generated below
 * honour (B) (American: honor)
 * meter (A) (British: metre) / metre (B) (American: meter)
 * organise (B) (American: organize)
 * realize (A) (British: realise)
 * categorise (B) (American: categorize), isation (B) (American: ization)
 * equalling (B) (American: equaling)
 * curb (A) (British: kerb).
 * curb (A) (British: kerb).


 * The only Americanism I could find was "curb", which is not being used in the same way as a roadside "kerb". Would "check" be a better term for intentionally holding back on speeds? Mac Dreamstate (talk) 18:12, 1 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Okay so I will keep the British spelling in mind as i go through this. I think "check" does work
 * ✅. Mac Dreamstate (talk) 01:34, 2 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Weasel phrase " It has been described", can you reword that?
 * I could reword it to "Dashiell Bennett at Business Insider has called it an extreme sport", but then that would require expansion for the other descriptions, which would seem to break up the brevity of the sentence (one of them doesn't have a specific author). Is it absolutely necessary for it to be changed? Mac Dreamstate (talk) 18:14, 1 March 2016 (UTC)
 * As phrases go, this is pretty harmless and sourced. ✅

Overall
This article is HUGE, it will take me a while to go through it all and am wondering if the length is a detriment, if I look at at Featured article criteria, it would recommend a Summary style.

So have patience, it will take me a while to get through this but i figured I would start with the above to give you something to start on.


 * From day one I had a feeling the article length might be an issue, but I've resisted the temptation to break it off into separate sub-articles. I know I've seen articles just as long—if not longer—with massive History sections. I also wouldn't like to see the Rules and other such sections broken off—least of all shunted to the ski jumping article, which I've barely touched. Mac Dreamstate (talk) 18:50, 1 March 2016 (UTC)
 * It would not be a deal breaker, looking at this the obvious part to break out if you choose to would be "History of Ski flying" and have this article summarize it.

Copyright violations
I checked on the tool that's on this page and found a couple of sources that had a high enough percentage that I had to take a closer look at them. Going through them the issues they picked up on were directly quoted in the article with attributions so that's not a problem as far as I can tell. ✅

Images
Looking through the images I believe all licenses etc. are in order. the one fair use claim is truly low res and I think that is acceptable. ✅

General Comments

 * Not sure if the word "licence" is misspelled or if that's the British spelling? I was expecting "License"
 * "Licence" is indeed BrEng. Mac Dreamstate (talk) 22:04, 1 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Is "disacknowledge" an actual word?
 * It does appear to be a word, based on Google's various dictionary results, but I could use "denounce" if that works better. Mac Dreamstate (talk) 22:06, 1 March 2016 (UTC)
 * I like "Denunce" as an option
 * ✅. Mac Dreamstate (talk) 01:32, 2 March 2016 (UTC)
 * "the United States opened their own ski flying venue in 1970", referring to the US as plural seems wrong I would go with "its own"
 * ✅. Mac Dreamstate (talk) 22:07, 1 March 2016 (UTC)
 * "Spectactors" should be "Spectators"
 * ✅ on the two instances I could find. Mac Dreamstate (talk) 22:08, 1 March 2016 (UTC)
 * "jumbotrons" - you may want to consider using a different term for these large screen displays, "jumbotrons" is not a universally known term
 * ✅ by changing it to "large screen displays". Mac Dreamstate (talk) 22:10, 1 March 2016 (UTC)
 * "Overaggression", I don't believe this is one word.
 * Tentatively changed the sentence to "aggressiveness and over-aggressiveness". If it still doesn't quite work, I can change it again. Mac Dreamstate (talk) 22:13, 1 March 2016 (UTC)
 * "highly visibly in red" should be "highly visible in red"
 * ✅. Mac Dreamstate (talk) 22:14, 1 March 2016 (UTC)
 * "individual competitions, however an" should be "individual competitions; however an"
 * ✅. Mac Dreamstate (talk) 22:14, 1 March 2016 (UTC)
 * "spectacular accidents" seems to be an interpretation, perhaps considering using a different word than "spectacular"?
 * Would "serious accidents" work better? Mac Dreamstate (talk) 22:48, 1 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Serious is a good choice.
 * ✅. Mac Dreamstate (talk) 01:32, 2 March 2016 (UTC)
 * "Went on to become a sports trainer." Could that be more specific? From that phrase he could be a darts trainer for a kids league in China as "sports trainer" is about as generic as it gets.
 * I can't find any English-language sources whatsoever, and then only a few hazy mentionings of him being a "sports trainer/coach" from his Norwegian-language Linkedin account. It would seem he stayed in wintersports (likely became a skiing coach; main thing is he survived to tell the tale!), but I can remove the entire contents of his "Aftermath" section if RS is an issue. I would, however, be reluctant to remove him from the Accidents list, as the source listing him as a notable crash victim is entirely reliable (an interview with him providing analysis of the crash), and video footage of it does exist. Mac Dreamstate (talk) 01:43, 2 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Well since you cannot find a source I guess there is no option but to leave it the way it is, thank you for checking. ✅
 * "cloose" should be "close"
 * ✅. Mac Dreamstate (talk) 22:15, 1 March 2016 (UTC)
 * "cloose" should be "close"
 * ✅. Mac Dreamstate (talk) 22:15, 1 March 2016 (UTC)

More as I go through it. I will go back and check over your feedback too, checking off what's ben addressed. MPJ  -US 21:47, 1 March 2016 (UTC)
 * And feedback on notes. MPJ  -US 21:58, 1 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Cannot believe I forgot this one - First time K-Point is used I think it would be good to add the term in parenthesis, it's listed later but should be used the first time it's listed in the main part of the article.  MPJ  -US 02:13, 2 March 2016 (UTC)
 * ✅. Should the second instance of "K-point (German: Konstruktionspunkt)", later in the article, remain as it is? Mac Dreamstate (talk) 03:08, 2 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Yes it can remain if you want, not a problem.

I have checked off almost everything except if "skispringen.com" as a reliable source?
 * Explained, above. Mac Dreamstate (talk) 13:08, 2 March 2016 (UTC)

Other than that I am going to do one more read through but it's getting very close. MPJ  -US 06:14, 2 March 2016 (UTC)


 * Source 80 - I am getting a weird gray picture? Not sure what that is about?
 * Ah, I got the ref number wrong on that one earlier. For some reason I thought #81 was the broken image. OK. The grey pic, ref #80, should be this screenshot—if it is permissible to use that (highly popular) free imagehost for it. I can provide all details on who and what is being depicted within the ref. Mac Dreamstate (talk) 13:00, 2 March 2016 (UTC)
 * My suggestion is to use imgur as the archive url, keep the original to show where it was once found. To me that's the last fix needed before I give it the GA stamp, MPJ  -US 13:19, 2 March 2016 (UTC)
 * ✅. Mac Dreamstate (talk) 13:27, 2 March 2016 (UTC)

I am.satisfied this is indeed a Good Article. Great work. I will start to process the GA status update now. MPJ  -US 13:44, 2 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Much thanks. I greatly appreciate your taking the time to read through it and provide all the feedback. Best of luck with the GA Cup. Mac Dreamstate (talk) 13:55, 2 March 2016 (UTC)