Talk:Skirmish at Top Malo House/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kges1901 (talk · contribs) 16:46, 30 June 2022 (UTC)

Will take this one at some point in the next few days. Kges1901 (talk) 16:46, 30 June 2022 (UTC)

Otherwise, an interesting article on a subject that receives little attention. Kges1901 (talk) 23:15, 30 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Lead does not explain what Operation Corporate was, summarize the action itself or explain why Top Malo House was of significance
 * ✅ Re-worded. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  21:40, 5 July 2022 (UTC)
 * a patrol formed from staff and trainees of the British Mountain and Arctic Warfare Cadre, a training detachment of the Royal Marines who were under the Control of 3 Commando Brigade - Could be less intricately detailed in the lead, as Boswell simply describes the Royal Marines as mountain commandos in his book's title
 * ✅ Tightened up the wording. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  00:46, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Seems non-standard to have a dedicated geography section, better to split up the details and mention only those relevant to an article. For example, there is no connection explained as to why coastal shipping is relevant to the skirmish. I haven't seen a battle article that goes into detail on the terrain of the region that the action took place in
 * I often include a geography section. See, for example, Admiralty Islands campaign and Landing at Nadzab, both featured articles. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  00:46, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Tensions between Britain and Argentina over a disputed territory the British called Falkland Islands and the Argentinians called Islas Malvinas I will note that the Falkland Islands War article takes a less equivocal position in describing the Falklands as a British dependent territory, which seems a more accurate summary of the situation
 * That was de jure the case in the UK from 1981 to 1985, so it is more accurate, but also very technical. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  00:46, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * The Argentine 602 Commando Company was formed from 54 commando-trained soldiers on 21 May 1982 and arrived in the Falklands a few days later If the British had already landed in the Falklands on 21 May, how did the Argentine commandos infiltrate in, this isn't explained in the article
 * ✅ It hadn't occurred to me that anyone would think that. Added that they took a plane. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  00:46, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * where they observed British air activity, where they were joined by the missing eight men choppy sentence with repetition of 'where they'
 * ✅ Re-worded. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  00:46, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * tactical approach suggest rewording jargon-sounding term
 * Suggestions welcome. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  00:46, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Boswell went to 3 Commando Brigade headquarters did Boswell literally go to the HQ or did he just request an airstrike? This sentence seems to be unnecessarily detailed
 * He literally went to brigade HQ. They were co-located, so he didn't have to walk very far. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  00:46, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * An "O Group", a formal process by which a commander informs his subordinates of the tasks they must perform in order to carry out a mission Suggest just calling this a briefing
 * ✅ Not the same thing. Included a link. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  00:46, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * provided screening from the accurate fire from the Argentine commandos firing from a stream bed three usages of 'from' in one sentence
 * ✅ Re-worded. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  00:46, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * six members of his patrol wounded, Inconsistent with casualties section, which says seven wounded
 * ✅ Corrected. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  00:46, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Is there any other impact or tactical significance to this action other than described in the article?
 * ✅ Added a bit at the end about this. Obviously, such a small action rarely has a great impact. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  21:40, 5 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Even in the context of the Falklands War, this was a small action, but it seems to have received a disproportionate amount of attention in Argentina and Britain. I think the odd worm-eye-view article can be useful and informative. This is the smallest action I have written up; the Battle of Kaiapit involved a company. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  21:40, 5 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I have finished making changes now. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  21:40, 5 July 2022 (UTC)