Talk:Sleazy (song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Petergriffin9901 (talk • message • contribs • count  • [/wiki/Special:Log?user= logs ] • email) 00:34, 2 September 2011 (UTC)

Lead

 * While working on her EP -> the is more proper
 * she chose to enlist the help of producer Bangladesh so that she could give her music a tougher edge -> Better choice of wording available. Also, is he known for being touch?
 * Lyrically, the song talks about rich guys hitting on her that try to buy her attention. -> I know you can do better
 * deadbeat father and also his relationship with Kesha -> what's the connection? Any mention who the child is? Its too vague
 * Partially done, i changed to friendship but his whole verse is just stupid, i went with what the source called it i cant elaborate further, sentence does its job fine. - (CK)Lakeshade  -  talk2me  -


 * that draws similar influence to the songs of -> confusing

Background

 * Is there a smaller picture of Andre available? That section break truly annoys me. Maybe you can crop it, honestly a third of the photo is black
 * While working on her album, Cannibal, -> we already established it's her album
 * Bangladesh. Bangladesh
 * In the lead, instead of writing vague terms like tougher, just quote "more gangster" ❌
 * Not a fan of quotes in the lead because they are suppose to need sources, which is completely contradictory. Both sentences get their points across. - (CK)Lakeshade  -  talk2me  -
 * Then use more encyclopedic wording.-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   03:44, 3 September 2011 (UTC)


 * to Rap-Up how -> Rap-Up
 * a verse for the song. "I sent -> a verse for the song: "I sent
 * André 3000 was "one of my favorite musicians -> is

Composition

 * rich men -> professional writing please; wealthy, affluent etc.
 * Vocally, the song follows previous singles footsteps -> you lost me there
 * The last sentence of the first paragraph needs tightening and is confusing. Re-read it aloud and you'll understand
 * The sample could use a better description, and should be sourced ❌
 * Source is in the composition, not needed here as its not something likely to be argued. - (CK)Lakeshade  -  talk2me  -
 * Sample needs appropriate punctuation.-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   03:44, 3 September 2011 (UTC)


 * Link PopMatters
 * Pop Matters however, -> Pop Matters, however,
 * Bill Lamb noted -> who's he?
 * noted on Bangladesh's production that it -> weird wording
 * What relationship are you implying? Sexual, professional?

Reception

 * called "Sleazy" "apropos" -> I'm not sure what that means, and I'm not sure what you linked it to either ❌
 * The link is to different meanings of the word, in this use it means "Very appropriate to a particular situation", basically it means she gets her point across well. Thats why it is linked. - (CK)Lakeshade  -  talk2me  - 03:16, 3 September 2011 (UTC)


 * Care to make is more of a sentence?-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   03:43, 3 September 2011 (UTC)
 * Link MTV
 * She didn't meet the song
 * with a positive review, she wrote -> poor transition
 * Link AOL radio
 * that the song followed similar form to that -> GR
 * commenting it is -> no flow
 * Sal Cinquemani commented -> who?
 * commented on "Sleazy" production
 * I don't understand the last sentence
 * Re-order the Canada sentence
 * Avoid choppy sentences

Last things

 * There is some information lacking in the background section, including: official release date, label, A-side and formet. That should be explained somewhere other than the infobox, and backed by references. I think that's the last of them, but I'll have a last look after.-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   12:56, 6 September 2011 (UTC)
 * - (CK)Lakeshade  -  talk2me  - 19:50, 6 September 2011 (UTC)