Talk:Slender: The Eight Pages/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: NegativeMP1 (talk · contribs) 21:10, 8 March 2024 (UTC)

 COLLECT MY PAGES  Soon. λ Negative  MP1  21:10, 8 March 2024 (UTC)


 * I'm still planning on reviewing this, just going to need a little bit longer. λ Negative  MP1  20:25, 20 March 2024 (UTC)

I'm sorry, but I'm going to have to regretfully fail this article at present. My reasoning for this is the weak Reception section. Several articles with critical commentary are simply stuffed into a single note, and the section is extremely short, which makes the article as a whole seem unfinished. An additional concern some could bring up would be the weight of opinions. There's also an extra review that could be used here. The rest of the article seems fine, though some writing is weird. If these issues are addressed and the article is renominated, I will be glad to take a second look, but at present there are serious concerns with broadness. I'm free to chat on my talk page or on Discord if you have any further questions. λ Negative  MP1  04:18, 23 March 2024 (UTC)
 * A gameplay screenshot would be nice.
 * "Hadley was a 35-year-old" The way that this reads makes it seem like he's dead. Reword to something like "At the time, Hadley was a 35-year-old ..."
 * I'm sure for an interview it would be acceptable, but what is the reliability of LevelSave?
 * "The Eight Pages was released on June 26 as a free beta for Microsoft Windows and Mac OS X, originally titled Slender." → "The Eight Pages was released on June 26 as a free beta for Microsoft Windows and Mac OS X. The game was originally titled Slender."
 * What made the game an "experiment"?
 * "The highly anticipated" anticipated by who?