Talk:Slow Dance (song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Crowz  RSA  03:58, 16 October 2010 (UTC)


 * Add link to music videos
 * Remove italics on FutureSex/LoveShow.
 * A Billboard writer said that Hilson "taps into her vulnerable side" on tracks like "'Slow Dance,' co-written by Justin Timberlake, and the ballad 'Make Love.' Why is 'Slow Dance,' co-written by Justin Timberlake, and the ballad 'Make Love.' in quote style? The sentence needs cleaning up.
 * Remove italics on PopMatters, since it is solely an online publication.
 * Jon Caramanica of The New York Times called the song "excellent." This sounds a bit bland and doesn't deserve its own sentence, if maintained this short. The sentence should be expanded.
 * , expanded on what reviewer said.


 * Calling the album's slow numbers a problem what are slow numbers? Also, why were they a problem?
 * Slow numbers in this sense means down-tempo songs a.k.a numbers, and the reviewer did not say why they were a problem.


 * Remove italics from Slant Magazine, since it is solely an online publication.
 * Add link to Paul Hunter (director)
 * What is The Grape Juice?
 * A site that interviewed Hilson.


 * The clip flips back to what happened earlier that night Clip flip? I think [[Flashback (narrative)] would read better
 * Once she arrives to the club, she is attracted to a particular guy Guy? Poor english


 * "But for the doubters, she proves it once again with this seductive new video from In A Perfect World." This is a bit off-topic.
 * It is a positive review for the clip, the reviewer said that Hilson proved her doubters wrong in the seductive video. This reception for the video.


 * Rap-Up said that Hilson, Remove the comma
 * "takes it nice and slow in the video for “Slow Dance." Clean up to "takes it nice and slow in the video for 'Slow Dance.' "


 * The video ranked at number eighty on BET: Notarized Top 100 Videos of 2009 countdown. Generally speaking, numbers above}} As a general rule, in the body of an article, single-digit whole numbers from zero to nine are spelled out in words; numbers greater than nine are commonly rendered in numerals.


 * Aside from performing it at the 2007 Zone 4 launch Should launch be capitalized.
 * No, because launch is just a noun meaning " to start on a course" and Zone 4 is the subject.


 * Mp3shopcart.com is not a reliable source. My suggestion is that if you cannot find a reference for the track listing, then you can simply remove the Track listing section and replace with  . That simple.
 * Removed, but per consensus at WP:SONGS, in the US, a song which is sent to airplay is considered a single as they cannot be re-released for digital download after an album is released and CD singles are extinct in the US.


 * I'm not sure, but Aside from performing it at the 2007 Zone 4 launch, Hilson performed the song on Late Night With Jimmy Fallon on September 17, 2009 alongside The Roots. doesn't read right to me and may need rewriting.
 * I believe a comma between 2009 and alongside would fix it, then it reads fine.


 * Surly there is more personnel than presented.
 * This is the personnel for the song per the album's liner notes.


 * The Source[19] underneath the Personnel section goes against MOS. If you find it necessary to include a reference, add it after the every line.
 * Where in MoS is against this? I used the personnel section in the featured article, 4 Minutes (Madonna song) as an example, and it is in this format.
 * See WP:WAX for why that is not a valid argument. But either way, it's really no reason to fail the article. Crowz  RSA  17:03, 6 November 2010 (UTC)


 * The Release history section really has no potential, it should be merged to the Composition and critical reception (between the break between composition and critical reception).
 * I moved it, but to background?


 * dabs need to be fixed
 * Fixed


 * A couple deadlinks/redirects need to be fixed.
 * Removed/fixed. Candy  o32  16:22, 6 November 2010 (UTC)


 * Result
 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail: