Talk:Smells Like Nirvana/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Curly Turkey (talk · contribs) 04:53, 12 November 2012 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * ""Smells Like Nirvana" was met with critical praise and helped to re-energize Yankovic's career, and Cobain considered the parody as a sign that they had "made it" as a band."
 * Split this in two: "...career. Cobain considered..."
 * Split this in two: "...career. Cobain considered..."


 * "The song's video was later nominated"
 * "later" is superfluous. Ditch it.


 * "another parody of a Michael Jackson song which had proven successful twice before"
 * "another" with "before" is redundant
 * without a comma after "which", it would seem to imply that Yankovic would re-parody a song he'd already done
 * better: "a parody of a Michael Jackson song, which had proven successful twice before"
 * or: "a parody of a Michael Jackson song, an appraoch [strategy, whatever] which had proven successful twice before"


 * "("Eat It" and "Fat")"
 * I'd kick these out of the parentheses: "with "Eat It" and "Fat""


 * "Cobain agreed, though initially, he inquired if"
 * Ditch the second comma


 * "drums as Dave Grohl, and all three wear clothing"
 * Run-on sentence. Split after "Grohl".


 * "The charted on several Billboard charts"
 * The what? Single?  Album?


 * "most successful single since his 1984 single "Eat It""
 * Reduncy. Try something like "most successful single since "Eat It" in 1984".


 * "Yankovic's largest comeback in his career"
 * better: "the largest comeback in Yankovic's career"


 * "The song was well-received by the media at the time."
 * "at the time" is redundant.


 * "Nirvana itself was also very pleased"
 * "very" is unnecessary.


 * "Nirvana was initially asked to perform, but they decline."
 * Do they habitually decline? ==> "declined"


 * "a similar looking shirt"
 * ==> "similar-looking", or better, just "similar"


 * "Yankovic worried how the crowds in Seattle, where Nirvana emerged from, would react to the parody."
 * better: Yankovic worried how the crowds would react (to the parody in Seattle), where Nirvana emerged from [came from, originated].


 * You use an awful lot of semicolons that don't really serve any purpose. I'd at least cut down, but to be honest, I don't think a single one of them is necessary (most of them are outright incorrect).
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * I was surprised that its charting success was given for the UK and Australia, but not Canada. I seem to remember that Yankovic was particularly popular in Canada, even more than in the States.  His only double-platinum record was earned in Canada.  You might want to check that out.
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * It would be a good idea to put the Fair Use Rationale of File:Smells Like Nirvana (Sample).ogg into a
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * I believe I've addressed all the issues. Thank you for the review.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   04:50, 13 November 2012 (UTC)
 * I believe you have as well, and am passing the article.  C üRly T üRkey  Talk Contribs 08:09, 13 November 2012 (UTC)
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * It would be a good idea to put the Fair Use Rationale of File:Smells Like Nirvana (Sample).ogg into a
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * I believe I've addressed all the issues. Thank you for the review.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   04:50, 13 November 2012 (UTC)
 * I believe you have as well, and am passing the article.  C üRly T üRkey  Talk Contribs 08:09, 13 November 2012 (UTC)
 * I believe I've addressed all the issues. Thank you for the review.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   04:50, 13 November 2012 (UTC)
 * I believe you have as well, and am passing the article.  C üRly T üRkey  Talk Contribs 08:09, 13 November 2012 (UTC)