Talk:Smokin out the Window/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cherrell410 (talk · contribs) 18:58, 2 July 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):
 * b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a. (reference section):
 * A number of sources are using - instead of –, as well as a number of sources are using DMY instead of MDY. Cherrell410 (talk) 23:42, 2 July 2023 (UTC)
 * b. (citations to reliable sources):
 * c. (OR):
 * d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * Various discussion son the talk page about the title of the article
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * Could we insert a picture of either Mars or .Paak?
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * Leaving my suggestions for improvement below:
 * Infobox: Is the chronology for Mars and .Paak's singles really necessary? Cherrell410 (talk) 19:29, 3 July 2023 (UTC)
 * Lead: Aftermath Entertainment and Atlantic Records released the song as part of their debut studio album. This could possibly make the reader think that AE and AR are a band (if they aren't familiar with RLs), and that SS didn't actually release the song.
 * Production and release: first para - quick question, all of that is included in the cd booklet? i don't have it so i wouldn't know...
 * Yes. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 10:01, 3 July 2023 (UTC)
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * Various discussion son the talk page about the title of the article
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * Could we insert a picture of either Mars or .Paak?
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * Leaving my suggestions for improvement below:
 * Infobox: Is the chronology for Mars and .Paak's singles really necessary? Cherrell410 (talk) 19:29, 3 July 2023 (UTC)
 * Lead: Aftermath Entertainment and Atlantic Records released the song as part of their debut studio album. This could possibly make the reader think that AE and AR are a band (if they aren't familiar with RLs), and that SS didn't actually release the song.
 * Production and release: first para - quick question, all of that is included in the cd booklet? i don't have it so i wouldn't know...
 * Yes. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 10:01, 3 July 2023 (UTC)
 * Pass/fail:
 * Leaving my suggestions for improvement below:
 * Infobox: Is the chronology for Mars and .Paak's singles really necessary? Cherrell410 (talk) 19:29, 3 July 2023 (UTC)
 * Lead: Aftermath Entertainment and Atlantic Records released the song as part of their debut studio album. This could possibly make the reader think that AE and AR are a band (if they aren't familiar with RLs), and that SS didn't actually release the song.
 * Production and release: first para - quick question, all of that is included in the cd booklet? i don't have it so i wouldn't know...
 * Yes. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 10:01, 3 July 2023 (UTC)
 * Yes. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 10:01, 3 July 2023 (UTC)


 * Production and release: second para - AE and AR released... --> the band released... under AE and AR, or something like at (as per above)
 * Composition: put the refs immediately after the adjective
 * I fixed it in another way. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 10:09, 3 July 2023 (UTC)

✅
 * Music video: "It also won video of the year, ..." The article just talked about it winning video of the year at a different award show, could we transition this so that the name of the second awards show is first, or add a transition that distinctly depicts it as a completely different award show, if that makes any sense
 * Cherrell410 (talk) 23:38, 2 July 2023 (UTC)
 * I still have some doubts regarding the last amendment. Please take a look and let me know if I need to fix something else. Thank you for the quick review, as well. Cheers, MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 10:10, 3 July 2023 (UTC)

(Criteria marked are unassessed)