Talk:Sober (Inna song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 16:05, 29 May 2020 (UTC)

Good to meet again, I'll review this soon --Kyle Peake (talk) 16:05, 29 May 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Use bullet points instead for any hlist
 * Streaming is not cited anywhere in the body; the ref only links to iTunes Stores, so either add another ref to back this up or remove the streaming info.
 * Streaming is a more and more relevant format nowadays, so I think it should definitely be mentioned here. The reference links to Apple Music where each release can also be simply streamed. I think this suffices. Cartoon network freak (talk) 07:00, 31 May 2020 (UTC)


 * "solely handled by Walcher under" → "solely handled by Walcher, under"
 * "Lyrically, it discusses a lonely person's wish" → "Lyrically, the former discusses a lonely person wishing"
 * "The former was directed" → "The first video was directed" since there is no former
 * "their artists in private settings" → "their artists in private home settings" to give further context but not overkill either

Background and composition

 * "solely handled by Walcher under" → "solely handled by Walcher, under"
 * Either add a citation that verifies streaming release for both here and Release history, or remove that info.
 * see comment above. Cartoon network freak (talk) 07:00, 31 May 2020 (UTC)


 * "Musically, "Sober" utilizes a" → "Musically, the track utilizes a"
 * "its predecessor, "Not My Baby" (2020)" → ""its predecessor, "Not My Baby", from earlier that year"
 * "can be heard, a "powerful" yet" → "can be heard, as well as a "powerful" yet"
 * "which prominently utilizes" → "that prominently utilizes"
 * "is used throughout" → "is used throughout the track" to specify that it's not throughout the chops
 * "and to personally connect with" → "and personally connect with"
 * "Inna sings "Is it" → "Inna sings, "Is it"
 * "consists of the lines "I just" → "consists of the lines, "I just"

Critical reception

 * "Upon release, "Sober" was received with positive reviews by" → ""Sober" was met with positive reviews from"
 * "While Modestas Mankus of" → "Modestas Mankus of"
 * "CelebMix's Jonathan Currinn also praised" → "while CelebMix's Jonathan Currinn also praised" since this is correct ordering for usage of "while"
 * "lyrical message which he tought fitted" → "lyrical message, which he thought fitted"
 * "delivery gave it a sense" → "delivery gave the song a sense"
 * Italicise MuuMuse
 * "deemed "Sober" a "surefire smash" and" → "deemed it a "surefire smash" and"
 * "whilst further praising its" → "whilst further praising the"

Music videos

 * "An accompanying music video for "Sober" was" → "An accompanying music video was"
 * "and Loops Production as the producers" → "and Loops Production received credit as the producers" for grammar fixes
 * "The music video was part of" → "The visual was part of"
 * "whose scope was to present their artists" → "which had the scope of presenting the label's music artists"
 * "the shoot as being unconventional since it" → "the shooting as being unconventional, since it"
 * "bath, bed and a chair" → "bath, bed, and a chair"
 * "CelebMix's Currinn deemed Inna's appearance" → "Currinn deemed Inna's appearance"
 * "to the one in her 2011" → "to the one for her 2011"
 * "was also released 21 May 2020, and was edited" → "was released on 21 May 2020 and had been edited"

Credits and personnel

 * Sure you can't add this?
 * There are not so many credits either way, and all have already been mentioned in the article's body. I don't think this section would be relevant here. Cartoon network freak (talk) 07:08, 31 May 2020 (UTC)

Track listing

 * Good

Release history

 * Good, apart from the streaming issue I have already explained
 * See my comment above. Cartoon network freak (talk) 07:08, 31 May 2020 (UTC)

Final comments and verdict
for now, changes should not be too hard to fix. --Kyle Peake (talk) 18:12, 29 May 2020 (UTC)
 * Thank you very much for the review, I have addressed the comments apart from where I commented. Greets;
 * ✅! --Kyle Peake (talk) 07:46, 31 May 2020 (UTC)