Talk:Soetran/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Gerald Waldo Luis (talk · contribs) 15:02, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

I will review this article. This is my first bio GAN I review, and I would love to learn many things from this decision.  Gerald WL  15:02, 14 December 2020 (UTC)

Lead

 * Keep either "Indonesian" or "Javanese." "Javanese" already covers Indonesia as a whole. In addition, recommend linking.  Gerald WL  15:07, 14 December 2020 (UTC)
 * Link regent.  Gerald WL  15:07, 14 December 2020 (UTC)
 * Link Trenggalek.  Gerald WL  15:07, 14 December 2020 (UTC)
 * Link Irian Jaya.  Gerald WL  15:07, 14 December 2020 (UTC)
 * Per tag, I suggest expanding the lead.  Gerald WL  14:05, 17 December 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ and lead expanded. Regards, Jeromi Mikhael (marhata) 14:29, 17 December 2020 (UTC)

Military career

 * Paragraphs 1, 2, and 3 used two citations, placed them at the same place. Mind relocating to the claim(s) it supports?  Gerald WL  07:28, 15 December 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ except for the 3rd paragraph; citation 1 and 2 is reinforcing each other regarding the dates and fact. --Regards, Jeromi Mikhael (marhata) 13:47, 17 December 2020 (UTC)


 * "After the war"-- what war?  Gerald WL  07:28, 15 December 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ --Regards, Jeromi Mikhael (marhata) 13:47, 17 December 2020 (UTC)

Trenggalek to Trenggalih

 * The subsection name is not so clear. Suggest renaming to "Renaming Trenggalek"  Gerald WL  07:28, 15 December 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ --Regards, Jeromi Mikhael (marhata) 13:47, 17 December 2020 (UTC)


 * There's no word on the aftermath: is it renamed or not. Suggest adding that up, if there is one.  Gerald WL  07:28, 15 December 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ --Regards, Jeromi Mikhael (marhata) 13:47, 17 December 2020 (UTC)

Parasamya Purnakarya Nugraha

 * First two sentence supported by two citations. Suggest relocate.  Gerald WL  07:28, 15 December 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ --Regards, Jeromi Mikhael (marhata) 13:47, 17 December 2020 (UTC)

Legacy

 * "the Soetran award"-- suggest capitalizing to "the Soetran Award."  Gerald WL  07:28, 15 December 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ --Regards, Jeromi Mikhael (marhata) 13:47, 17 December 2020 (UTC)

Infobox

 * Three redlinks. Either interwiki link, create stub (if person warrants a WP article), or remove redlinks.  Gerald WL  15:07, 14 December 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ Removed redlinks. Regards, Jeromi Mikhael (marhata) 00:48, 15 December 2020 (UTC)

Governor of Irian Jaya

 * Link Irian Jaya.  Gerald WL  14:08, 17 December 2020 (UTC)
 * Acub Zainal is redlinked. Suggest removing.  Gerald WL  14:08, 17 December 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ except point 1, as it is already linked in the lead. Regards, Jeromi Mikhael (marhata) 14:29, 17 December 2020 (UTC)

Irian Jaya earthquake

 * "As a result, 12 large villages in the X Valley were swallowed by the Earth." What is "X Valley" and suggest rewording the metaphoric "swallowed by the Earth."  Gerald WL  09:10, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ Ah, my apologies. The X Valley was without name prior to the 2000s; it is now known as the Baliem Valley. Regards, Jeromi Mikhael (marhata) 12:35, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
 * , last thing: in paragraph 3, ref 31 and 27 is used at the same time. Similar case at "Death", last sentence. Mind relocating or removing one of them, if appropriate?  Gerald WL  12:53, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ Regards, Jeromi Mikhael (marhata) 13:01, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
 * , in my opinon this has passed the GA criteria. Congrats!  Gerald WL  13:03, 18 December 2020 (UTC)

Comments
, I've done what you requested. Please check. Regards, Jeromi Mikhael (marhata) 14:29, 17 December 2020 (UTC)
 * , see "Irian Jaya earthquake" above. After that is resolved, I'll do a linking copyedit, and that should make it for a good article. Apologies for the wait.  Gerald WL  09:11, 18 December 2020 (UTC)