Talk:SooperDooperLooper/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Newtothisedit (talk · contribs) 02:37, 10 November 2022 (UTC)

I'll review this --Newtothisedit (talk) 02:37, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
 * 1) Is it well written
 * A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
 * B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
 * 1) Is it verifiable with no original research
 * A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
 * B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons&mdash;science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:
 * C. It contains no original research:
 * D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
 * B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
 * 1) Is it neutral
 * It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
 * 1) Is it stable
 * It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
 * 1) Is it illustrated, if possible, by images
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Is it neutral
 * It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
 * 1) Is it stable
 * It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
 * 1) Is it illustrated, if possible, by images
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Is it illustrated, if possible, by images
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

Comments

 * For the caption of one image it says "SooperDooperLooper's train" and the other it says "SooperDooperLooper's train" I would change this so they have the same wording
 * Add the year when a date is within a new month Ex: "Work began on the project site on October 29" to "Work began on the project site on October 29 1976"
 * "The roller coaster's iconic vertical loop was finished" This use of iconic could be seen as peacock language. I would change this sentence to "The roller coaster's vertical loop was finished"
 * "A 150-foot (46-meter) tunnel was added to part of the roller coaster for the 1979 season which would feature lights and sounds" change to "A 150-foot (46-meter) tunnel featuring lights and sounds was added to the roller coaster for the 1979 season."
 * "The roller coaster necessitated around 500 tons" to "The roller coaster needed around 500 tons"

That's all I have--Newtothisedit (talk) 02:37, 10 November 2022 (UTC)


 * Appreciate another review; all suggestions have been fulfilled from above. Let me know if there's anything else you spot! :D Adog  ( Talk ・ Cont ) 03:45, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Looks good, passing it. Newtothisedit (talk) 03:49, 10 November 2022 (UTC)