Talk:Soprano trombone/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Marshelec (talk · contribs) 08:04, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

I plan to review this article over the next week. Marshelec (talk) 08:04, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

The lead

 * The lead is a bit short, and currently doesn't include some interesting aspects covered in the body. I suggest additional sentences outlining recent use of Soprano trombone in jazz performance, and also the use as a training instrument for children, and for trumpet players.
 * Although modern instruments are made, the soprano remains a rare trombone seldom written for, compared to the tenor, bass, or even the uncommon alto trombone. This sentence is doing too much, and is a bit hard to read, especially for content in the lead. I suggest a rewrite and split into two sentences for better flow.

History

 * The earliest surviving instrument was made in 1677, held by the Kremsegg musical instrument museum. Hmmm. Going to the page Schloss Kremsegg   I find: "The Kremsegg Castle Musical Instrument Museum has been closed since December 31, 2018." So where is the instrument now ??
 * Johann Sebastian Bach composed three cantatas (BWV 2, 21 & 38) around 1723, where four trombones are required; the highest part was written in ... this might be better as: "Johann Sebastian Bach composed three cantatas (BWV 2, 21 & 38) around 1723, with four trombone parts; the highest part was written in ..."
 * A possible reason for this was because the Stadtpfeiffer (lit. 'town pipers'), who were trained to play all instruments, may have found fast and high (soprano) passages easier to play .. may be better as: "A possible reason is that the Stadtpfeiffer (lit. 'town pipers'), who were trained to play all instruments, found that fast and high (soprano) passages were easier to play ..."
 * ... while describing the alto as obsolete. add link to alto trombone

Construction

 * The B♭ soprano trombone is built with dimensions similar to the trumpet. perhaps I am a bit picky here, but I suggest ".. B♭ trumpet" for complete clarity.
 * add link to "tenor trombone"
 * ..built with a shorter slide of six positions rather than seven ... ideally we would not promote an article that included a ctitation needed tag

Sopranino and piccolo trombones

 * this section comes as a surprise on a first read-through. There is no mention of other sizes until this point. I note that much of the content is already in Trombone. One option is to remove the content from this article. An alternative would be to treat it the same as for Serpent (instrument), and have a heading "Sizes", to give a bit more lead-in.