Talk:Sora (Kingdom Hearts)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Retrolord (talk · contribs) 11:07, 22 July 2013 (UTC)

I will review.  ★ ★KING RETROLORD★ ★  11:07, 22 July 2013 (UTC)

Review:
 * 1) "which makes Donald Duck and Goofy" Which causes Donald Duck, instead,  ★ ★King∽~Retrolord★ ★  06:59, 23 July 2013 (UTC)
 * 2) "Sora's Keyblade's primary form is the Kingdom Key (キングダムチェーン Kingudamu Chēn?, Kingdom Chain), resembling a classic skeleton key approximately 3.5' long, with a long silver keychain extending from the hilt, and a Mickey Mouse token on the end of the keychain. But through using Keychains, the Kingdom Key can assume a variety of unique forms" Cut this down a bit please, thats way too much detail
 * 3) " Maleficent sows discord into Riku" Clarify this please,  ★ ★King∽~Retrolord★ ★  06:59, 23 July 2013 (UTC)
 * 4) "In Kingdom Hearts 3D: Dream Drop Distance" Unreferenced paragraph
 * 5) "During the majority of events during Kingdom Hearts 358/2 Days" During used twice in one sentence, rephrase please?  ★ ★King∽~Retrolord★ ★  06:59, 23 July 2013 (UTC)
 * 6) "In the game's secret ending, set after the events of Kingdom Hearts II Ansem the Wise tells Aqua about Sora's adventures, and how he may help all the people connected to him. In the final scene, Sora decides to save them after reading Mickey's letter" Is this notable? I'm not sure we need to detail the secret game ending in the article.  ★ ★King∽~Retrolord★ ★  06:59, 23 July 2013 (UTC)
 * 7) "Haley Joel Osment has received praise for portraying Sora in the English version of the series." This photo should be removed, its rather low quality and doesn't add anything to the article.  ★ ★King∽~Retrolord★ ★  06:59, 23 July 2013 (UTC)
 * 8) "Nomura has stated that Sora's name can be interpreted as "sky" as his name, sora (空?), means sky in Japanese" Please re-write and clarify,  ★ ★King∽~Retrolord★ ★  06:59, 23 July 2013 (UTC)
 * 9) "It also shows his relation with Riku and Kairi, making their three names together "Skys, Land, and Sea."" Remove this sentence please,  ★ ★King∽~Retrolord★ ★  06:59, 23 July 2013 (UTC)
 * 10) "The writings from Jiminy Cricket's journals which are supposed to be written by Nomura in the Japanese versions joking that they have similar writings and wanted people to recognize his hand-writing" Remove this sentence please,  ★ ★King∽~Retrolord★ ★  06:59, 23 July 2013 (UTC)
 * 11) "Following the first Kingdom Hearts, Nomura was worried about how players having Sora in a high level would use him in Kingdom Hearts II starting once again with a low level due to the games' natures" This makes no sense... and I think this entire paragraph should be removed,  ★ ★King∽~Retrolord★ ★  06:59, 23 July 2013 (UTC)
 * 12) The reception section needs to be cut down, preferrably by a paragraph or more it is far too long.  ★ ★King∽~Retrolord★ ★  06:59, 23 July 2013 (UTC)
 * 13) Finally, the lead does not summarize the article,  ★ ★King∽~Retrolord★ ★  06:59, 23 July 2013 (UTC)


 * Thank you for the review! I will be addressing the points soon. Judgesurreal777 (talk) 22:02, 25 July 2013 (UTC)

New reviewer needed
Retrolord has been indefinitely blocked, so this article will need a new reviewer. I'm closing this review so that this nomination will return to its spot in the queue. Though this will show up in the article history as "not listed", the close is purely on procedural grounds and not a judgement on the state of the article. Thanks for your work on it! Sorry for this delay in your review, but at least RL's comments above will give you points to consider in the meantime. -- Khazar2 (talk) 16:22, 28 July 2013 (UTC)