Talk:Souzan Barakat

Feedback from New Page Review process
I left the following feedback for the creator/future reviewers while reviewing this article: Nice work.

North8000 (talk) 02:34, 31 May 2022 (UTC)

Order of events
According to the Manual of Style for biographies, the life events for a person should be presented "... in chronological order, from birth to death ... Within a single section, events should almost always be in chronological order." See MOS:CHRONOLOGICAL for more. This article departs from that guideline in several places, which, as a reader, I find confusing. I am particularly confused by the fact that the murder weapon was found after the getaway car was sold but before the article discusses the deceased's burial. This sounds like the disposal of evidence before a body is buried. It took me several readings to work out these two events occur nine months apart and happened in the opposite order. There are other places where the article seems incomplete, or skips over information, only to come back to it later. For example, this person's birth and immigration to Germany. Also, I am not clear why a doctor is being prosecuted in 2012 in connection with this killing for issuing a certificate about the state of health of someone who was killed in 2011. When was the certificate issued and what relevance does it have in this case? - Cameron Dewe (talk) 20:22, 27 May 2024 (UTC)