Talk:Soviet frigate Razyashchiy/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 13:55, 16 November 2021 (UTC)

Hi, I'll take a look at this. Feel free to challenge or correct me where necessary.

Prelim

 * Duplicated links: NATO reporting name and Anti-submarine warfare
 * Fixed.


 * Earwig reports no copyvio
 * Image looks good
 * No edit war (difficult to accomplish when you're almost the only editor!)
 * Thank you!

Lede and infobox

 * Include "1135" in the Krivak-class frigate link; "1135" doesn't mean anything to most people without the link
 * Reinserted missing word.


 * "Большой Противолодочный Корабль, BPK" - which part of the previous sentence is this translating? it's not obvious
 * It is the capitalised title. I have added a clarification to the main text.


 * "minor hull damage from colliding with the destroyer USS Fife." - this makes it sound like a traffic accident rather than an attempt to stop her getting close to the US fleet
 * I don't think the beam was 142m, as the infobox claims!
 * Oops, comma replaced.


 * Installed power figures don't seem to match up with in text claims?
 * Hopefully that is clearer now.

Design and development

 * "TsKB-340", "TsKB-53" - I assume these are design/construction facilities but it really isn't obvious and should be clarified
 * Noted that these are design bureau.


 * "led to a revisit of the project" - worth clarifying that this was to ensure their new vessels measured up to the American ships, and when did this occur?
 * Yes. The date is not in the sources.


 * You note the location of TsKB-53, can you do the same for TsKB-340?
 * Done.


 * "larger and more capable design." - in what ways was it more capable?
 * Read on...


 * "BPK" - if this means anti submarine role, why not just put that? An acronym from a different language isn't very helpful to the casual reader
 * I have added an explanation.


 * "Guard Ship" does not need capitalising
 * Guard Ship is a translation of the official Soviet designation, SKR.


 * "two M7 sets" - is there no link to this? I realise that you explain what they were straight afterwards
 * There is no article.


 * "Razyashchiy had a primary mission of anti-submarine warfare" - does this not go against your previous assertation that she was now a guard ship? Probably worth noting that she was a guard ship against submarines specifically, if that was the case; otherwise the guard ship sentence is a little vague
 * The original role designation was Large Anti-Submarine Ship (BPK) and later Guard Ship (SKR). The sources are not clear what the difference was in practice.


 * "quadruple torpedo tube mounts" - torpedoes to fight submarines?
 * They were dual purpose, although primarily anti-submarine.


 * "two single mounts for 45 mm (2 in) 21-KM guns were carried on the superstructure." - this doesn't sound like the guns were actually present. Were they?
 * The sources are not clear as to how often the guns were actually carried.


 * "decoy-dispenser" - decoy or decoy-dispenser needs some kind of link
 * There is no article. Would you like a red link?

Construction and career

 * that can be translated to striking
 * Added


 * Last sentence of para 1 and first of para 2 both use "undertook", which is a little awkward
 * Edited


 * You note in the lede that the Mauritius visit was to foster relations, but only say in text that this was the case for the Vietnam visit
 * There is more detail on the Vietnam visit. I have adjusted the lead to clarify.


 * I realise her service won't have been of the most exciting nature here, but are you able to note vaguely what she was up to between 1983 and 1991?
 * Unfortunately only in unverified sources.