Talk:Space opera in Scientology/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Grapple X (talk · contribs) 00:39, 15 September 2012 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria I think the Dianetics centre down the road still has my number but I'll give this a go.
 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * "Hubbard taught that humans could recall the details of these lives through a process known as auditing" -> I'm quite likely to be wrong, but I believed auditing was the process of removing engrams and achieving Clear; I was told nothing of thetans and past lives (maybe I didn't pay enough). That's a good point, I was using the term a bit broadly, I know there are a number of different practices in the church and some of them apparently get into the former life stuff eventually. I rephrased to avoid implying that about auditing. Mark Arsten (talk) 01:09, 15 September 2012 (UTC) "Academics who study religion" -> I know "religious academics" doesn't really work here but is there a better way of going at this? Theologians, theology critics, etc? How about "Scholars of religion"? Mark Arsten (talk) 01:09, 15 September 2012 (UTC) "Xenu placed several billion of his citizens onto DC 8 planes" -> DC 8 points at Douglas DC-8, is this right? I believe so, that's where the link on our Xenu article points. Mark Arsten (talk) 01:09, 15 September 2012 (UTC) "Because thetans had been "implanted", or forced to believe, various faulty ideas" -> is the use of implanted correct here? It's in quotes so I assume it's meant to be nonstandard but if the parenthetical comes out this reads "Because thetans has been "implanted" various faulty ideas", which is odd. Ok, I rephrased that to hopefully convey the same meaning with the awkward/incorrect wording. Mark Arsten (talk) 01:09, 15 September 2012 (UTC) "Urban notes that this is similar to Aleister Crowley's teachings about astral projection, although he notes that Hubbard did not use that term" -> two "notes" here; change the second one to "adds" maybe? Good catch, changed. Mark Arsten (talk) 01:09, 15 September 2012 (UTC)
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * No issues here.
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * Seems fine.
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * Grand.
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * Some vandalism but not for over a month; would be wise to keep an eye on it (and yourself. those guys don't fuck about).
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * Maybe move the Rinder image to the left to avoid three images stacked horizontally like that. Images are fine in and of themselves, all free. (File:Planetstoriesclichecover.jpg is Commons, too, but it might be a bit much);
 * Moved Rinder to the left, added the comic cover above. Mark Arsten (talk) 01:11, 15 September 2012 (UTC)
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Not really sure I'm putting this on hold other than force of habit, but it's a well-written article with little to be addressed. GRAPPLE   X  00:39, 15 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the compliment, and double thanks for doing a quick review. Mark Arsten (talk) 01:11, 15 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Ain't no thing. Passing. Well done! GRAPPLE   X  01:19, 15 September 2012 (UTC)
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Not really sure I'm putting this on hold other than force of habit, but it's a well-written article with little to be addressed. GRAPPLE   X  00:39, 15 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the compliment, and double thanks for doing a quick review. Mark Arsten (talk) 01:11, 15 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Ain't no thing. Passing. Well done! GRAPPLE   X  01:19, 15 September 2012 (UTC)