Talk:Special Air Service Regiment/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 10:20, 10 June 2014 (UTC)

Comments
 * Checklinks identifies a couple of links that could do with some attention. One is to Jane's which requires registration. Not that it is a GA requirement, but if you are planning to take this to ACR you might want to fix them and formalise the website links as part of the References?
 * Just a few more things to check. Peacemaker67 (send... over) 11:03, 11 June 2014 (UTC)
 * I've made a couple of recommendations about the images and the web links, but they are not war-stoppers for GA. Dan, would you be able to look at the prose? I looked at it myself when I assessed it for B-Class, and I think I'm too familiar with the content, and I'm just not seeing where it could be improved. If not, no biggie. Thanks, Peacemaker67  (send... over) 11:22, 11 June 2014 (UTC)

Comments. As always, feel free to revert my copyediting. - Dank (push to talk)
 * Copyediting now. Please replace single quotes throughout by double quotes.
 * "two troops were again placed on standby": Consistency between articles may be needed here; readers will be confused if we say for instance "40,000 troops were deployed" in one article and "two troops were again placed on standby" in another article. - Dank (push to talk) 15:54, 11 June 2014 (UTC)
 * I suggest using something like "a force of 40,000". Peacemaker67 (send... over) 00:25, 12 June 2014 (UTC)
 * "low key": informal
 * "Christmas Island": link it, so readers won't get confused with the other Christmas Island
 * "(4 RAR (Commando))": MOS has a problem with "))"
 * Perhaps a note to clarify, and use 4 RAR in the body?
 * I copyedited the article per my copyediting disclaimer, down to where I stopped, at East Timor, the Philippines and Fiji. These are my edits. - Dank (push to talk) 16:54, 11 June 2014 (UTC)
 * Thanks very much, Dan! Regards, Peacemaker67 (send... over) 00:21, 12 June 2014 (UTC)
 * Sure thing. - Dank (push to talk) 01:34, 12 June 2014 (UTC)
 * Thank you, much appreciated. I made a couple of tweaks and left edit summaries - happy to discuss though if you disagree. Anotherclown (talk) 11:42, 12 June 2014 (UTC)
 * No objections. - Dank (push to talk) 13:24, 13 June 2014 (UTC)
 * suggest you link troop and Trooper (rank), and explain that trooper is the rank of private soldiers in SASR.
 * Horner and Thomas detail a range of organisations that were the Australian forebears of the SASR, and M Special Unit should definitely be included. Perhaps a bit more info (including from Horner and Thomas) regarding the Regiment's WWII forebears wouldn't go astray, including the Coastwatchers.
 * "Z Force" is a bit informal, the unit names were Z Special Unit and M Special Unit. I know a couple of old boys that hate being referred to as being a member of "Z Force", strangely enough. The articles are at those titles, so perhaps the names and links should be per the article titles.
 * Suggestion only. As there is no article about the Blackhawk accident, more information on it (and the controversy) should probably be added if this is going to ACR.
 * 4 Squadron sort of re-appears without warning.
 * It is probably worth clarifying that the Regiment has no link to the RAR since it achieved regimental status.
 * I am done. Peacemaker67 (send... over) 03:59, 12 June 2014 (UTC)
 * Gday, thanks for spending the time looking over this article. Some excellent points and hopefully I have addressed most of them now - pls see my changes here . I don't want to add too much about the Blackhawk crash as I think it might result in undue weight. Interestingly Horner 2002 only gives the incident just under two pages of coverage. Probably wont take to ACR but if I do I'll see what else could be added. Anyway when you get a chance pls let me know if anything else is required. Anotherclown (talk) 11:42, 12 June 2014 (UTC)
 * No worries, a pleasure. All good, listing. Regards, Peacemaker67 (send... over) 11:56, 12 June 2014 (UTC)