Talk:Spirit Fruit Society

More review
The article is neutral and informative. Here are a few places where I think we could make improvements: Joja lozzo  21:40, 15 May 2012 (UTC)
 * 1) The term, "the Society" (capitalized), is used as shorthand for the full name. There are also places where it's referred to in lower-case ("the society"). I prefer the lower-case version since it is a society, the common noun form feels less officious, and the distinction between "the society" and "society in general" is clear.
 * 2) The lead says it's the longest lasting utopian society but it's not clear what source is used to support that. I think a short paragraph in the article body explaining it, defining what is included and excluded from "utopian", mentioning a runner-up, and citing good sources, would help give that statement some context.
 * 3) Similarly by what criteria is it determined to be the most successful utopian society and what is the source for that statement?
 * 4) I think the lead would be improved by mentioning the society's three locations during its lifetime.
 * 5) While Kellog is known as an an outspoken and controversial figure, no mention is made of his influence on the young Beilhart. What attracted him to Kellog's enterprise?
 * 6) I edited the paragraph on society principles. Not sure it's improved but I was seeking to develop parallel construction in the list of principles.
 * 7) Spirit Fruit Farm appears once without introduction or explanation. Perhaps info on sources of funds to purchase it, what size it was, who owned it could be included in that (or an earlier) paragraph.
 * 8) The "free gift" paragraph confuses me: "It dictated that, if anyone wanted something that they [who, the society?] had to give — printed materials in particular — they had only to ask and it would be given to them without charge. After reading or seeing the Society in practice, those people were free to contribute if they wished, but it was stressed that this was a 'free gift' and not payment." I'm not sure who is being referred to by the third person plural pronouns. Who was the gifter and who was the giftee and what this had to do with seeing the society in practice and was it the gift or the contribution (or both) that is the "free gift".
 * Thanks very much! I'll get to work!   Wikipelli  Talk   23:23, 15 May 2012 (UTC)