Talk:Squatting in Namibia/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 00:37, 1 May 2023 (UTC)


 * Hello again, Mujinga! I will get to this within seven days. Please note that I am returning to GA reviewing after an hiatus, so please WP:TROUT me if I make a mistake. Thanks,  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 00:37, 1 May 2023 (UTC)
 * Hello hello - from tomorrow my internet access will be intermittent for a week but I should still be checking in. Looking forward to your comments, Mujinga (talk) 11:00, 1 May 2023 (UTC)
 * Noted! Feel free to take some time. :)  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 17:34, 3 May 2023 (UTC)
 * There we are; on hold for now. My comments are below.  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 18:06, 3 May 2023 (UTC)
 * Thanks for them, I've answered on everything - Mujinga (talk) 16:17, 4 May 2023 (UTC)
 * Awesome work! I am now very pleased to pass yet another great squatting-related article. Congrats!  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 01:40, 5 May 2023 (UTC)

Copyvio
Earwig says good to go.

Files
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Prose

 * In the lead, wikilink informal settlements.
 * done Mujinga (talk) 20:55, 3 May 2023 (UTC)
 * "and thus the concept of squatting thus did not apply." – remove one of the thuses to avoid redundancy.
 * good spot! Mujinga (talk) 20:55, 3 May 2023 (UTC)
 * "to do this was subsequently made illegal" – any idea when?
 * yes it was the Native Administrations Proclamation of 1922 - in mentioning that, I rejigged things a bit, I think it's better now, thanks for the inspiration! Mujinga (talk) 16:16, 4 May 2023 (UTC)
 * That looks much better!  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 01:40, 5 May 2023 (UTC)
 * "ten bantustans were established, the remaining" – recommend "ten bantustans were established, and the remaining"
 * yes that's better Mujinga (talk) 15:32, 4 May 2023 (UTC)
 * "one of the biggest goals" – suggest largest because it sounds slightly more formal IMO.
 * changed! Mujinga (talk) 15:32, 4 May 2023 (UTC)
 * "so as to allow construction" – I believe it should be "so as to allow the construction" due to the highway being the singular subject.
 * i rephrased, hope it reads better now Mujinga (talk) 21:06, 3 May 2023 (UTC)
 * "and 8,090 at Gobabis" – why not in like the other settlements?
 * it reads ok to me, but happy to change to "in" Mujinga (talk) 15:31, 4 May 2023 (UTC)
 * No, that is fine with me!  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 01:40, 5 May 2023 (UTC)
 * I would rename § Legal to § Legality.
 * done Mujinga (talk) 15:31, 4 May 2023 (UTC)
 * "saying it had not" – 'it' being?
 * it is the challenge, I've rejigged because it was garbled, no wonder it was confusing Mujinga (talk) 15:30, 4 May 2023 (UTC)