Talk:St. Gatien/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 02:26, 14 July 2012 (UTC)

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 02:26, 14 July 2012 (UTC)

Here are the issues I found:
 * Blair Athol currently links to a disambiguation page. DONE
 * "St. Gatien went on to become a dominant stayer," is stayer racing jargon? if so link, it not then reword.DONE
 * "St Gatien’s, bred by Major E. Brace," St. Gatien DONE
 * Does St. Gatien have a period or not? Both are used interchangeably, try to keep them consistent. DONE
 * "fee of 3 guineas.[9]" spell out three GUINEAS DONE
 * "On November 19 1884 The Rover" make sure dates are in dmy format since it's a British horse.DONE
 * "most of his races by Charles Wood who won the" comma after Wood DONE
 * "£500. [11]" rm space there DONE
 * "The customary huge crowd was in attendance, despite the “cold and cheerless” weather." should be cited
 * "entry"-[16] apparently" should be a comma instead of a dash. DONE (added second dash so they work parenthetically)
 * Generally, titles in references should not be in all caps. DONE

About halfway through, will finish tomorrow; this gives you enough to work on for now though. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 03:39, 14 July 2012 (UTC)

Dealt with issues as above BUT we have a (hopefully temporary) problem as the paperspast.natlib.govt.nz website is down. I couldn't, therefore, verify the "cold and cheerless" quote, although I'm pretty sure it's from reference 13.  Tigerboy1966  06:39, 14 July 2012 (UTC)
 * The site worked for me, and it was in fact in Ref 13 so I added it in. Here are the rest of my concerns:


 * The first paragraph in After Epsom gets a bit jargony, namely I keep seeing settled, but not sure what that means since it seems to be used a couple different ways. SEE BELOW DONE
 * "entered in the St Leger, did" St. Leger DONE
 * "placing his future as a racehorse, in considerable doubt." rm comma DONE (there was an extra phrase after the comma which I remove, but forgot to update the punctuation)
 * "St. Gatien made a good recovery, and made his debut" made a full recovery sounds a bit better.DONE
 * "h. [2]" rm space DONE
 * "who won inpressively by" impressively DONE
 * "until the summer 1890 when" summer of DONE

I'll put the article on hold and will pass it when the issues are fixed. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 15:25, 14 July 2012 (UTC)

Thanks for your comments. I'm working on the jargon. This is a weakness of mine as I tend to use phrases which would be instantly comprehensible to racing fans but confusing to non-specialists. Historical articles like this one add an extra layer of terminology, so I have to be careful. Should be done by tomorrow.  Tigerboy1966  19:39, 14 July 2012 (UTC)

I think I've covered all the points now.  Tigerboy1966  15:21, 15 July 2012 (UTC)
 * It looks better after the copyedit, so I'll pass this as a GA. Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 05:00, 18 July 2012 (UTC)