Talk:St. Valentine's Day (30 Rock)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer:  The Flash  I am Jack's   complete   lack of surprise 02:25, 1 April 2010 (UTC) Hi. I'll be reviewing this as part of April's GAN Backlog Elimination Drive. See Talk:I Married Marge/GA1 for my GAN setup. I've placed the article on hold; good luck improving the article.  The Flash  I am Jack's   complete   lack of surprise 02:25, 1 April 2010 (UTC)

Lead

 * I'd suggest adding in what number the episode is overall in the series continuity; i.e., "It was the 11th episode of the show's third season and the whatever episode overall."
 * Done. -- ThinkBlue   (Hit   BLUE)
 * In the plot paragraph, replace the semi-colon with a comma.
 * Done.
 * In stead of "Nielsen ratings system," I'd suggest "Nielsen Media Research."
 * Done.

Plot

 * @The whole of the first paragraph: What? Very confused here... Can you clean it up and make it more clear?
 * I'm not feeling very solid about the rest of the prose in this section. Can you touch it up a notch?
 * I think I got it. If not, I'll get a copy-editor.
 * It's fine.  The Flash  I am Jack's   complete   lack of surprise 00:19, 2 April 2010 (UTC)

Production

 * Everything in the first paragraph after the first sentence is unsourced.
 * It really doesn't need to be sourced, common sense, but removed.
 * Surely there's a source that Kenneth is played by McBrayer? In fact, here's one off the top of my head.
 * Do we really need a source?
 * Everything in an article should be sourced except for the plot summary, IMO.
 * I forgot to update this. I added a source.
 * "The episode was shot" → "The scene was shot"
 * Done.
 * Join the last paragraph with the McDonald's one.
 * The McDonald's thing and the deleted scenes are way different things.
 * I just thought because they were each about filming, but whatevs.
 * "In one of the cut scenes, was a conversation" Cleanup
 * I think I got it.
 * A little too many commas in the last sentence.
 * I think I got it.

Reception

 * Ratings thing: same as in lead.
 * Done.
 * In EW's review: "theme; however,[...]"
 * I don't know what you mean, can you explain?
 * Oops, never mind; read it wrong.

Images

 * No infobox screencap?
 * Don't know what image to use, so. Also, I don't want to violate the non-free content criteria.
 * How about this? It can meet the NFC criteria because it details how the apparent "product placement" was used. It's fine though if you don't want to use it.
 * Seems durable. What should I say for the caption? "Jack and Elisa buying McFlurry's and spending Valentine's Day together"? Also, one of the reasons I don't add a screenshot, cause I'm not good in "brainstorming" a readable caption. -- ThinkBlue   (Hit   BLUE)  14:45, 2 April 2010 (UTC)'
 * LOL, how about just "Jack and Elisa buy McFlurry's on their Valentine's Day date"?  The Flash  I am Jack's   complete   lack of surprise 16:23, 2 April 2010 (UTC)
 * Yeah, exactly. Anyways, added screenshot to the article. -- ThinkBlue   (Hit   BLUE)  16:49, 2 April 2010 (UTC)
 * PD Jon Hamm image is fine.

Final say
Alright, I'm satisfied. Good job, I'm passing the article. Thanks for taking care of the issues. Cheers,  The Flash  I am Jack's   complete   lack of surprise 20:43, 2 April 2010 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the review, Flash, I appreciate it. :) -- ThinkBlue   (Hit   BLUE)  00:29, 3 April 2010 (UTC)