Talk:St John of God Berwick Hospital

Update information

 * 1)  Update reference to St John of God Health Care to read: St John of God Health Care is one of the largest Catholic providers of health care services in Australia.
 * 2)  Update reference tname of home nursing services to St John of God Healthcare at Home.

--AnneGartner (talk) 08:40, 5 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Hi AnneGartner. Thank you for the suggestions, and thank you for using edit requests instead of editing the article directly. I am declining the first edit request for two reasons. First, the claim that your hospital network is the largest in Australia needs to supported by an independent source. I can't just take your organization's word for it. Second, labeling a hospital network the "largest" is vague and ambiguous. St John could be the largest by hospital beds, by expenditures, or by number of doctors; but the point is, Wikipedia articles should avoid using vaguely positive terms when more specific descriptions would do better.
 * For your second edit request, could you be more specific? Do you mean to say that "Health Choices" has been renamed "Healthcare at Home?" I have some qualms about featuring brand names in articles. Just calling it a home nursing service would be less promotional. I'll have to think about it, and other editors should feel free to step in on this one.
 * One more thing – could you clarify which organization is paying you for these edits? Is it St John of God Health Care or a third-party agency? I need this information so I can fill out the disclosure form for you. Best, Altamel (talk) 18:50, 5 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Talk page watchers, please see a relevant discussion at WP:COIN. Altamel (talk) 18:50, 5 June 2020 (UTC)
 * As has said, could you be more specific about what you want to change? I am marking this as answered.  Please remove the   when you respond. Thanks  &thinsp;Darth&thinsp; Flappy   '&laquo;Talk&raquo;'  23:47, 24 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Hi Altamel.Thanks for letting me know. Re Healthcare at Home - it is the name of the home nursing service. It would be accurate to just describe it as home nursing and remove any naming. I am employed directly by St John of God Health Care so there is no third party agency. Thanks. 58.109.203.115 (talk) 01:13, 25 June 2020 (UTC)