Talk:Staines-upon-Thames/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Tim riley (talk · contribs) 12:57, 6 July 2022 (UTC)

Starting first read-through. Comments to follow shortly.  Tim riley  talk   12:57, 6 July 2022 (UTC)


 * Thanks I look forward to working with you again. Best wishes Mertbiol (talk) 13:02, 6 July 2022 (UTC)

Initial comments
I can see nothing in the article as it stands that would prevent me from promoting it to GA straight away: it is certainly of GA quality already in my view. But I offer you a few suggestions for tweaks here and there that would, I think, improve it. Up to you whether you want to follow them up or not.
 * Lead
 * "The first bridge across the Thames is thought to have been built by the Romans" – does this mean the first bridge across the river at Staines or the first bridge across the river full stop? Not clear.
 * ✅ Have added "at Staines" so the sentence now reads: "The first bridge across the Thames at Staines is thought to have been built by the Romans..." Mertbiol (talk) 20:04, 6 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Location
 * "magistrates courts" – could do with an apostrophe: you give them one later in the text.
 * ✅ Missing apostrophe added. Mertbiol (talk) 20:04, 6 July 2022 (UTC)


 * Topography and geology
 * "Medieval" – here and later: not sure the word should be capitalised – the OED doesn't think so. Moreover it looks odd to capitalise Medieval but not Middle Ages, which our WP article capitalises throughout. (Afterthought: a blue link to that article from this one wouldn't hurt.)
 * ✅ decapitalised all instances of "medieval" and have add a blue link at the term's first appearance. Mertbiol (talk) 20:04, 6 July 2022 (UTC)


 * Roman and Saxon
 * "54—96 AD … 73-75 High Street" – we have problems with number ranges, here and elsewhere in the text. In both these cases the Manual of Style would have us use unspaced en-dashes: 54–96 AD … 73–75 High Street.
 * ✅ Have replaced all em-dashes and hyphens for number ranges with en-dashes. Mertbiol (talk) 20:04, 6 July 2022 (UTC)


 * Staines in the second world war
 * Most unusual not to capitalise Second World War (or the First, later). True, The Guardian doesn't, but its aversion to capitals is positively phobic. Our Wikipedia articles certainly capitalise the terms, and I am sure you should here.
 * ✅ All instances of "First World War" and "Second World War" capitalised.


 * UK parliament
 * "The town is in the parliamentary constituency of Spelthorne and has been represented at Westminster since May 2010 by Conservative Kwasi Kwarteng" – could do with an "as of" or "as at", to avoid WP:DATED.
 * ✅ Have split sentence and rephrased to read: "The town is in the parliamentary constituency of Spelthorne. As of July 2022, it is represented at Westminster by Conservative Kwasi Kwarteng, who was first elected in May 2010." Mertbiol (talk) 20:04, 6 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "Staines" electoral division, … "Staines South and Ashford West" – here and in the following subsection the inverted commas look rather strange to me. I don't think they are wanted.
 * ✅ Inverted commas removed. Mertbiol (talk) 20:04, 6 July 2022 (UTC)


 * Early schools
 * "National Schools for boys and girls" – could do with a link to National school (England and Wales).
 * ✅ Link added. Mertbiol (talk) 20:04, 6 July 2022 (UTC)


 * Places of worship
 * "to those who died in the 1972 Staines Air Disaster" – earlier it is capitalised as "Staines air disaster", which I'm sure is better.
 * ✅ changed to "Staines air disaster". Mertbiol (talk) 20:04, 6 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "to accommodate 280 worshippers and a sliding partition" – I think a comma before the conjunction would help the reader's eye along the sentence.
 * ✅ Comma added. Mertbiol (talk) 20:04, 6 July 2022 (UTC)


 * Culture
 * More em-dashes in date ranges where the MoS calls for en-dashes.
 * ✅ All em-dashes replaced with en-dashes. Mertbiol (talk) 20:04, 6 July 2022 (UTC)


 * Literature
 * "Hostess Quickly" – not quite the way to title the character. In the text I have (The Globe Edition) she is "Hostess of a tavern in Eastcheap, formerly Mistress Quickly, and now married to Pistol". I think I'd just call her "the Hostess" as she isn't Quickly any more ("the quondam Quickly", Pistol calls her).
 * ✅ Character renamed to "the Hostess". Mertbiol (talk) 20:04, 6 July 2022 (UTC)


 * Reservoirs
 * "North east" or "northeast"? We have the one in the caption and the other in the text.
 * ✅ Changed "north east" to "northeast". Mertbiol (talk) 20:04, 6 July 2022 (UTC)


 * War Memorial
 * "The names of 196 people who died in the first world war" – if, as I assume, all 196 were men then use of a gender-neutral noun looks just a bit contrived.
 * ✅ Changed "people" to "men". Mertbiol (talk) 20:04, 6 July 2022 (UTC)


 * Notable residents
 * We've got further trouble with dashes in this section. The date ranges should be unspaced en-dashes, and if you want em-dashes in, e.g. "— born in Staines-upon-Thames" they too should be unspaced (MoS).
 * ✅ All em-dashes replaced by en-dashes. Mertbiol (talk) 20:04, 6 July 2022 (UTC)
 * If I were writing this article, which of course I'm not, I shouldn't refer to the town as Staines-upon-Thames, but merely Staines, when referring to Furse and the others associated with the town before its name was changed in 2011.
 * ✅ Instances of "Staines-upon-Thames" changed to plain "Staines" where appropriate. Mertbiol (talk) 20:04, 6 July 2022 (UTC)

That's all I can find to quibble about. Over to you. I certainly shan't bother putting the review on formal hold while you consider these very minor points. –  Tim riley  talk   19:23, 6 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Hi . I think I have addressed all of your comments above. Please let me know if you have any further concerns. Best wishes Mertbiol (talk) 20:04, 6 July 2022 (UTC)
 * You have indeed. I think this article more than meets the GA criteria, and, though I am not a specialist in articles about towns, this one doesn't seem to me to fall far short, if at all, of FA standard. If you take it on to FAC please ping me and I'll look in. Meanwhile, so far as GAN is concerned:

Overall summary
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

Thank you!
Thanks for your prompt, diligent and thorough review. I hope our paths cross again soon! Best wishes Mertbiol (talk) 20:52, 6 July 2022 (UTC)