Talk:Stan Robb/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 00:10, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

Will review.  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 00:10, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
 * I really like the images; they are a nice way of illustrating an article. On hold; over to you!  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 17:15, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

Copyvio check
Good to go. The newspaper extract from Canton Daily News is PD.

File(s)
All files are relevant and have a valid public domain rationale on Commoms.

Prose

 * The lead could be greatly expended; it should summarise some more in-depth aspects of his career.
 * In § Early life and education, I would lead with his full name as its his first mention in the body.
 * "Robb also attended for a time Mercersburg Academy." – should for a time not come after the Academy?
 * "Around 1917, he registered for World War I" – change to "Around 1917, he enlisted in World War I."
 * "with one newspaper writing" – in this context I would name the publication.
 * The last paragraph of the first section reads strangely to me. Could some elaboration perhaps be given on ""fame""?
 * "Robb had tackled a Hartford player, and Nichols" – is the comma necessary here?
 * "He registered for World War II in February 1942." – enlisted in like above.

Refs
Passes spotcheck on refs 5, 10, 15, 23 and 28. Was able to confirm 5 and 28 via Ancestry.com.

Others

 * Short description should go at the very top.
 * Recommend adding template:use X English if applicable.
 * I believe I've addressed all of the issues; let me know if I missed anything or if there's anything else you'd like done. Thanks. BeanieFan11 (talk) 20:01, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Nope, looks good! I really love what you did with the lead. Pass.  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 23:13, 1 August 2023 (UTC)