Talk:Star Wars: The Force Awakens/GA1

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 02:01, 30 January 2021 (UTC)

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments later in the week. Some Dude From North Carolina wanna talk? 02:01, 30 January 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Editor Mary Jo Markey is credited first in the poster so they should be credited first in the infobox.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 06:33, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Is the mention of the $258.6 million net budget necessary?
 * ✅ removed Chompy Ace 06:33, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Link the Star Wars: The Force Awakens (soundtrack) in the sentence containing the phrase "returned to compose the score"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 06:33, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Fix the following redirect: "highest-grossing film in North America " " "highest-grossing film in North America" "
 * ✅, also changed wording per WP:FILMBOXOFFICE Chompy Ace 06:33, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * "third-highest-grossing film at the time of the release" "third-highest-grossing film at the time of its release"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 06:33, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * "The film received five nominations" "The film received numerous accolades, including five nominations"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 06:33, 31 January 2021 (UTC)

Plot

 * This section is 679 words, so there's no problems with WP:FILMPLOT.
 * ✔️ Chompy Ace 07:13, 31 January 2021 (UTC)

Cast

 * This archive does not mention any description of any character.
 * ✅ relocated as in Avengers: Endgame Chompy Ace 06:39, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * The reference after "don't change…" isn't working.
 * now marked as dead Chompy Ace 06:39, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Try changing all uses of "..." in this section and in others to "[...]" as it's more visually pleasing.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 09:25, 31 January 2021 (UTC)
 * This hasn't been changed.
 * ✅ all uses now [...] Chompy Ace 20:38, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * "Han does not" "[Han] does not"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 06:45, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * "Some things don't change…" "Some things don't change."
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 06:45, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * "a fairy tale…" "a fairy tale."
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 06:45, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * The reference after "more broken hearted" isn't working.
 * now marked as dead Chompy Ace 06:54, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * "He's been taught about [Luke]" "He's been taught about Luke Skywalker"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 06:46, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * The reference after "suggest things" isn't working.
 * now marked as dead Chompy Ace 06:54, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Any reason why the description for Lor San Tekka isn't formatted the same way as the other characters?
 * ✔️ per consistency with MCU films to have their formatting, in that case do not have quotations or notes. Examples are Black Widow (2021 film) and Shang-Chi and the Legend of the Ten Rings. Chompy Ace 06:41, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * I couldn't find any mentions of Hayden Christensen or Ian McDiarmid in this reference or this one.
 * ✅ removed Chompy Ace 06:58, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * The reference after "Vocal Consultants" isn't working.
 * now marked as dead Chompy Ace 06:58, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * The reference after "Statura, an admiral in the Resistance" isn't working.
 * now marked as dead Chompy Ace 06:58, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * The second reference after "dealer on Jakku" isn't working.
 * now marked as dead Chompy Ace 06:59, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Kiran Shah isn't mentioned in this citation.
 * ✅ added reference pre-existed from the BFI Chompy Ace 07:00, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Move the references after "Thomas Brodie-Sangster and Kate Fleetwood" to the end of the sentence they're in.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 07:08, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * "cameo as stormtroopers" "cameo as stormtroopers"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 07:05, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * The second reference after "cameo as stormtroopers" isn't working.
 * now marked as dead Chompy Ace 07:05, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * The reference after "Resistance officer" isn't working.
 * now marked as dead Chompy Ace 07:05, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * The reference after "Captain Cypress" isn't working.
 * now marked as dead Chompy Ace 07:05, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * "Additionally, minor roles appear in the film including: Crystal Clarke, Pip Andersen, Christina Chong, Miltos Yerolemou, Amybeth Hargreaves, Leanne Best, Judah Friedlander, and Kevin Smith." "Additionally, Crystal Clarke, Pip Andersen, Christina Chong, Miltos Yerolemou, Amybeth Hargreaves, Leanne Best, Judah Friedlander, and Kevin Smith appear in minor roles."
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 07:11, 31 January 2021 (UTC)


 * The reference after "and musicians" isn't working.
 * ✔️ removed per Special:Diff/1003881307 Chompy Ace 07:12, 31 January 2021 (UTC)

Development

 * Are the four references after "The Force Awakens' first screenplay was written by Michael Arndt" all needed? Seems like it falls under WP:OVERLINK.
 * ✅ now 1 reference Chompy Ace 02:17, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * It feels like there's a rough transition between George Lucas and Luke Skywalker, so I would link Luke Skywalker and put his name in full the first time he's mentioned.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 02:24, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "Original Trilogy" "original trilogy"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 02:24, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * I couldn't find Ben Affleck in this reference.
 * ✅ removed Chompy Ace 02:17, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * J. J. Abrams didn't say he "[returned] to the roots of the first Star Wars film", he said he went back to the roots of the first films". Not the first film, the first films.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 02:24, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "studying languages such as Hindi and Gujarati" "studying various languages, such as Hindi and Gujarati".
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 02:24, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Link The Last Jedi.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 23:42, 2 February 2021 (UTC)

Pre-production

 * Since its still about the British: "the film industry" "its film industry"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 02:31, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "Maryann Brandon and Mary Jo Markey" "Mary Jo Markey and Maryann Brandon" per consistency with the credits
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 02:31, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Why is Daniel Mindel mentioned twice?
 * ✅ reduced to last name Chompy Ace 02:31, 2 February 2021 (UTC)

Casting

 * Couldn't find any mention of Ireland or a city from the country in this, this, or this.
 * ✅ removed Ireland Chompy Ace 05:45, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Is the image necessary if you can't see a single person?
 * ✅ moved image at the Cast section (similar to Avengers: Age of Ultron) Chompy Ace 06:20, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * The claim that "Casting began around August 2013" needs a reference.
 * ✅ removed Chompy Ace 06:20, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Link and archive this reference to the citation after "the script by Kasdan and Abrams".
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 06:20, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Reference after "Frida Gustavsson" is dead.
 * marked as dead Chompy Ace 06:20, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "into April. In April" "into April. That same month,"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 06:20, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * As he was already mentioned in this section: "Hamill, Serkis, Oscar Isaac" "Hamill, Serkis, Isaac"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 06:20, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * The sentence "The announcement was originally planned for May 4, but was announced early for fear of media leaks" needs a reference.
 * ✅ removed Chompy Ace 06:20, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Link Gwendoline Christie.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 06:20, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * The reference after "to accommodate him" is dead.
 * marked as dead Chompy Ace 06:20, 2 February 2021 (UTC)

Filming

 * The reference after "65 mm IMAX format" is dead.
 * marked as dead Chompy Ace 21:53, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Don't link "selfie" per WP:OVERLINK.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 21:53, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Some long captions have periods, some don't. Try to be consistent here, and in the rest of the article.
 * ✅, as in Avengers: Age of Ultron, with every image's captions do not have a period Chompy Ace 21:53, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Link Millennium Falcon.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 21:53, 2 February 2021 (UTC)

Post-production

 * Mark the reference after "Disney Research" with "|url-access=subscription"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 21:53, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "as 124–125 minutes" "as 124 minutes"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 21:53, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "nothing to do there of value, except to be sitting around" "nothing to do there of value [...] So we ended up leaving those things out."
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 21:53, 2 February 2021 (UTC)

Music

 * Is the entire quote after "in ways that" necessary. Try making it shorter.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 21:55, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Link Culver City.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 21:55, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * The two references after "remainder of the recordings" mention LA, so maybe mention that in the article as well.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 21:55, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * A reference is needed for Williams saying recording sessions were "very luxurious".
 * ✅ removed Chompy Ace 21:55, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * The following sentences also need references for verification: "The score was recorded by the Hollywood Studio Symphony, a freelance orchestra, with sessions continuing on and off over that five-month period. The 90-piece orchestra recorded 175 minutes of music, although nearly an hour of that was discarded, modified, or rerecorded as Abrams reedited the film. Williams' theme for Snoke was recorded by a 24-voice men's chorus."
 * ✅ for adding a reference, for rewording a copied text within the reference Chompy Ace 21:55, 2 February 2021 (UTC)

Release

 * "(such as Italy and France, releasing it on a Wednesday)" "(such as Italy and France)"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 23:07, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Remove "(releasing on a Thursday)".
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 23:07, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Couldn't find "3D and IMAX 3D" in this reference.
 * changed reference Chompy Ace 23:07, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Where did "4,134 theaters" come from?
 * ✅ added reference Chompy Ace 23:07, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Why is information about the title in this section? Seems like something that would go in #Post-production.
 * ✅ moved Chompy Ace 23:07, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Consistency: "ten thousand" "10,000"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 23:07, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "In total it sold over $50 million in pre-sales breaking the record." "In total, it sold over $50 million in pre-sales, breaking the record."
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 23:07, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Mark the reference after "main titles" with "url-access=subscription".
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 23:07, 2 February 2021 (UTC)


 * A reference is needed for the claim that "Ultimately, Disney's logo was largely absent from the film's marketing—but nonetheless, appeared on merchandise and the startup sequences of Star Wars smartphone games".
 * ✅ removed Chompy Ace 23:07, 2 February 2021 (UTC)

Marketing

 * Sort of like in The Social Network article, make this subsection its own section in between #Music and #Release.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 06:12, 3 February 2021 (UTC)


 * The reference after "the significance of the new characters" is dead.
 * marked as dead Chompy Ace 06:12, 3 February 2021 (UTC)


 * In the first paragraph, link The Hollywood Reporter and The Guardian.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 06:12, 3 February 2021 (UTC)


 * The reference after "several characters" is dead. Additionally, the archive isn't working.
 * Chompy Ace 06:12, 3 February 2021 (UTC)


 * The second teaser being watched 88 million times broke which record?
 * ✅ removed records Chompy Ace 06:12, 3 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "The event was broadcast live". If you are referring to the trailer just say "The trailer" or "The teaser".
 * ✅ removed Chompy Ace 06:12, 3 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "At the 2015 San Diego Comic-Con International" "At the 2015 San Diego Comic-Con International"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 06:12, 3 February 2021 (UTC)


 * A reference is needed for the claim that the third trailer "debuted during the halftime break of Monday Night Football, before being released online".
 * ✅ added Chompy Ace 06:12, 3 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "since France is one of the first countries" "since France was one of the first countries"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 06:12, 3 February 2021 (UTC)

Tie-in literature and merchandise

 * "with releases from multiple publishers starting in late 2015" "with were released by multiple publishers starting in late 2015"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 07:37, 3 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Mark the reference after "until January 2016" as "url-access=subscription"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 07:37, 3 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Since this reference specifically focuses on the retailer: "Many retailers were unable to meet demand for Star Wars products" "Many retailers, such as Toys "R" Us", were unable to meet demand for Star Wars products due to the event".
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 07:37, 3 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Sorry, I suggested a sentence with a typo: "with were released by multiple publishers starting in late 2015" "which were released by multiple publishers starting in late 2015"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 20:51, 3 February 2021 (UTC)

Video games

 * Can this section be changed to just prose instead of a list of games? The current format seems weird compared to the rest of the article.
 * ✅ converted to prose Chompy Ace 07:33, 3 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Since they're short, combine both paragraphs into one.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 22:33, 3 February 2021 (UTC)

Home media

 * The sentence "The home media release contains additional footage" seems short, and the reference being used contains more than just that.
 * ✅ expanded Chompy Ace 07:41, 3 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "by Abrams" "by director J. J. Abrams"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 07:38, 3 February 2021 (UTC)

Box office

 * The first reference being used says the film made "$936.6 million" in the US and Canada. Box Mojo is the one saying "$936.7 million", so I would just cite that.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 00:03, 4 February 2021 (UTC)


 * I couldn't find "110 million tickets" in this reference, and it's already covered at the end of the sentence with this.
 * Chompy Ace 00:03, 4 February 2021 (UTC)


 * The reference after "($128 million)" is dead.
 * marked as dead Chompy Ace 00:03, 4 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Is the claim that the film had "the most tickets sold by any film in the United States and Canada since Titanic (1997) ($128 million)" actually covered here?
 * ✅ removed Chompy Ace 00:03, 4 February 2021 (UTC)

Commercial analysis

 * No mention of "4,134 theaters" here.
 * added pre-existing reference Chompy Ace 00:13, 4 February 2021 (UTC)


 * The first and third references after "$175–250 million" are from December, so change "In November" to "Months prior to the film's release"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 00:16, 4 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "that the film will be the first" "that the film would be the first"
 * ✅ removed Chompy Ace 00:10, 4 February 2021 (UTC)


 * I couldn't find any mention of $3 billion in this reference.
 * ✅ removed Chompy Ace 00:10, 4 February 2021 (UTC)


 * The second reference after "Avatar's global gross" is dead.
 * marked as dead Chompy Ace 00:10, 4 February 2021 (UTC)
 * I said the second one was dead, not the first.
 * Chompy Ace 01:08, 4 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "analysts feel that it lacked the novelty factor; they also cite" "analysts felt that it lacked the novelty factor; they also cited"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 00:16, 4 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "previously done. Films do not play in overseas theaters as long as they did back when Avatar was released" "previously done, and for films not playing in overseas theaters as long as they did back when Avatar was released"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 01:12, 4 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "Mike Fleming of Deadline.com" "Mike Fleming of Deadline Hollywood"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 00:06, 4 February 2021 (UTC)


 * The following changes are needed because the quote is off: "the net profit to Disney an astounding $923M, and the Cash on Cash Return twice that of any other film [released in 2016], at 2.31" "the net profit to Disney was an astounding $780.11M, and the Cash on Cash Return was twice that of any other film [released in 2016], at 2.00."
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 01:12, 4 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "when Avatar was released" "when Avatar was released"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 01:51, 4 February 2021 (UTC)

United States and Canada

 * Couldn't find "$119.1 million" here or here, but it's probably in another source.
 * reference with Deadline Hollywood Chompy Ace 21:01, 4 February 2021 (UTC)


 * I also couldn't find "$62.1 million" here.
 * ✅ removed Chompy Ace 21:06, 4 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "$247,966,675" is really specific, and it's not in this source. "$59,982 per theater (or $17,220 per screen)" is also not there.
 * ✅ removed "59,982 per theater (or $17,220 per screen)" claim, reference with The Numbers Chompy Ace 21:15, 4 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "record holder(s)" "record holders"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 20:15, 4 February 2021 (UTC)


 * The reference after "in its original run" is dead.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 20:15, 4 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Couldn't find "$190.8 million" or "$63.6 million per day" here. I also couldn't find "The opening-weekend audience was evenly split among those under and over the age of 25, with 58% of the audience male, 71% adults, 20% families, and 9% teenagers" in the reference.
 * ✅ removed Chompy Ace 21:21, 4 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Add a website parameter to the reference after "biggest single- and opening-day record".
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 02:17, 5 February 2021 (UTC)

Other territories

 * Add a comma after December 16, 2015.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 20:15, 4 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Distribute the references after "16 other countries".
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 02:25, 5 February 2021 (UTC)


 * This reference says the film made $14.4 million in the UK, not $14.3 million.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 02:17, 5 February 2021 (UTC)


 * I couldn't find "Mexico ($3.4 million)" or "Italy ($3.1 million)" here. Additionally, the reference says Japan made $3 million, not $3.1M.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 02:17, 5 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Where did "72 markets" come from?
 * ✅ removed Chompy Ace 02:17, 5 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "United Kingdom, Ireland and Malta ($50.6 million)" "United Kingdom ($50.6 million)" per this source.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 02:17, 5 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Shouldn't the sentence that starts with "Revenues in the film's second weekend decreased by only 39.8% in the United States and Canada" be in #United_States_and_Canada?
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 02:17, 5 February 2021 (UTC)
 * This wasn't done.
 * ✅ moved Chompy Ace 21:12, 5 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "$70 million in 10 days" "$70 million in 11 days"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 02:17, 5 February 2021 (UTC)

Critical response

 * Could bullet points be added to the cite bundle after "positive reviews from critics"?
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 21:41, 5 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Update RT.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 21:41, 5 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "women, under-25s and under-18s" "women, and people under the ages of 25 and 18"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 21:43, 5 February 2021 (UTC)


 * In this section, try removing some quotes, paraphrasing, and better categorizing (making paragraphs that talk about the same thing) using WP:RECEPTION.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 02:10, 6 February 2021 (UTC)

Accolades

 * The two references after "2016 Critics' Choice Awards" don't mention The Force Awakens.
 * both refs to a sole ref The Hollywood Reporter, which mentions the film Chompy Ace 21:22, 5 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Can a reference be added for The Force Awakens being "the most nominated film in Saturn Award history"?
 * ✅ removed claim and reworded sentence Chompy Ace 21:39, 5 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "Best Actor for Ford" "Best Actor for Harrison Ford"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 21:23, 5 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "Best Supporting Actor for Driver" "Best Supporting Actor for Adam Driver"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 21:23, 5 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Can a reference be added for the last part of the claim that "The Force Awakens received eleven nominations at the MTV Movie Awards, the most for the ceremony"?
 * both refs to a sole ref MTV, so it could remain the "received eleven nominations at the MTV Movie Awards" sentence; sentence, by removing "the most for the ceremony" Chompy Ace 21:35, 5 February 2021 (UTC)

The Last Jedi

 * Link Rian Johnson.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 23:40, 5 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "he would direct" "he would write and direct"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 23:40, 5 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Can you list the names in full, rather than just their last names?
 * ✅, and added links Chompy Ace 23:40, 5 February 2021 (UTC)

The Rise of Skywalker

 * "Abrams" "J. J. Abrams"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 23:42, 5 February 2021 (UTC)


 * A reference is needed for "The Rise of Skywalker was released on December 20, 2019"
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 23:42, 5 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Link original trilogy.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 23:45, 5 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Link prequel trilogies
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 23:45, 5 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Mark Hamill and Gwendoline Christie aren't mentioned in this reference, so I suggest adding another.
 * added reference for Hamill claim and Christie does not appear, which I removed her due to Phasma's death in The Last Jedi (via The Rise of Skywalker: The Visual Dictionary) Chompy Ace 23:42, 5 February 2021 (UTC)