Talk:Start the Party (album)/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 21:12, 2 November 2020 (UTC)

I will try to have this completely reviewed by tomorrow --K. Peake 21:12, 2 November 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Genre is unsourced; just because they are a post-hardcore band, does not automatically make the album that genre
 * The word "record label" is not needed in the lead since that context is unnecessary here
 * "for their third studio album" → "for their third studio album,"
 * "recorded Start the Party with" → "recorded the album with" though you need to mention next to his reference in the first section that he was producer
 * "Start the Party revolves around party-going; it was compared to" → "It revolves around party-going, having received comparisons to"
 * "of the Foo Fighters, and" → "of the Foo Fighters and"
 * "Initial promotion consisted of a headlining UK tour," I thought the opening sentence was referencing their January 2013 tour of the country?
 * "embarked upon a UK tour" → "embarked on a UK tour"
 * "Start the Party reached" → "The album reached"
 * "in the UK album charts, while "Start the Party" and" → "on the UK Albums Chart. "Start the Party" and" with the wikilink; suggesting splitting since the last para is currently only two sentences long which is definitely too short

Background and production

 * Target crowd-funded to Crowdfunding
 * "While writing it," → "While writing the album,"
 * "or label to" → "or record label to"
 * "The band promoted" → "The Blackout promoted"
 * "of their previous tours," → "of their touring,"
 * "They recorded with" → "The band recorded with"
 * "The band initially planned" → "The Blackout initially planned"
 * "The Blackout" while Borland's" → "The Blackout", while Borland's"
 * "when they band realised" → "when the band realised"

Composition and lyrics

 * "at the moment"." → "at the moment."" since that is a full quote
 * "a hip-hop-less version" → "a hip hop-less version" with the target
 * "drew comparison to" → "drew comparisons to"
 * "The record had less" → "The album has less"
 * "Butler and Smith said" → "Smith and vocalist Gavin Butler said" since he should be introduced earlier in the article instead
 * "leans on the band's" → "leans toward the Blackout's"
 * "is one of the album's" → "is one of Start the Party's"
 * Target ballad to Sentimental ballad
 * "about those of others." → "about the lives of others."
 * "This is followed by" → "The track is followed by"
 * "which has an introduction" → "which has an intro"

Release and touring

 * Retitle to Release and promotion
 * Img main text should instead say that they toured throughout 2013
 * "On 17 September," → "On 17 September of that year,"
 * "the following January." → "in January 2013"
 * "through the band's website." → "through the Blackout's website."
 * "the UK in October." → "the UK in October 2013."
 * "Vocalist Gavin Butler said he was" → "Butler said he was"
 * "live performances from their" → "live performances from the band's"
 * "includes covers of" → "features covers of"
 * Target administration to Business administration
 * "moved to the respective venues" → "moved to selected venues"
 * "in January and February," → "in January and February of 2013,"
 * "on 2 April the same year." → "was released on 2 April 2013."
 * "from these appearances was used for" → "from their appearance was used in"
 * "In October," → "In October of that year,"
 * "in the UK with" → "across the UK, with"
 * "to last until November," → "to last until November 2013;"
 * "vocalist Gavin Butler had a" → "Butler had a"
 * "for January and February 2014," → "for January and February of 2014,"

Reception

 * "singable hooks."" → "singable hooks"." for consistency
 * "found it" → "found the album"
 * Target pop to Pop music
 * "Butler's "accessible" → "He further wrote that Butler's "accessible"
 * "into stars."" → "into stars"."
 * "said the band" → "admitted that the Blackout"
 * "polished album,"" → "polished album","
 * [17] should solely be at the end of the sentence
 * "said The Blackout come across" → "said the Blackout come across" per MOS:THEMUSIC
 * Target Scrappy Doo to Scrappy-Doo
 * "said if the band removed" → "wrote that if the band removed"
 * "of the expletives" → "of the expletives on Start the Party"
 * "to Inglis, the record's" → "to Inglis, the album's"
 * "what the members were" → "what the band members are"
 * "in the UK album charts." → "on the UK Albums Chart." with the wikilink
 * Merge the two sentences for the singles, changing where the second currently starts to being after a comma and saying: "while "Runnin' Scared" reached number 35 on the chart."

Track listing

 * Target Jason Perry to Jason Perry (singer)
 * Target DJ Jazzy Jef & the Fresh Prince to DJ Jazzy Jeff & The Fresh Prince

Personnel

 * Use the Design sub-heading instead for photography, cover design and artwork

Charts

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * but good job on how smooth the refs mostly look, great to take on a review for you again after the backlog has finished! --K. Peake 11:13, 3 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Done. Yeepsi (talk) 11:51, 3 November 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ after I completed some brief copyediting, applauds not only for your usual quick response but also a very well-written article! --K. Peake 13:56, 3 November 2020 (UTC)