Talk:Static Prevails/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:24, 7 February 2021 (UTC)

Has been a while since you've had a GAN up for review, but I will take on this due to your timely responses in the past on strong articles! --K. Peake 07:24, 7 February 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * The single is not mentioned as being released in 1996 like the infobox claims; write this out in the body
 * "to Capitol Records in mid-1995." → "to Capitol in mid-1995 for further releases."
 * "bassist Mitch Porter who" → "bassist Mitch Porter, who"
 * Wikilink Encinitas, California
 * "acted as producers." → "acted as producers for the album."
 * Target pop punk to Pop-punk
 * "Static Prevails was promoted with a mini US tour," → "it was promoted with a mini tour of the country," since you write "US" later in this sentence
 * "with Smoking Popes" → "with the Smoking Popes"
 * Mention the release date of the lead single once you have sourced it
 * Annoyingly, the full date isn't known, so I went with the year (which I've now sourced). Yeepsi (talk) 13:27, 7 February 2021 (UTC)
 * No issue with that. --K. Peake 13:49, 7 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "Static Prevails met with mixed reviews" → "The album received mixed reviews"
 * "with comments on" → "who mostly commented on"

Background and development

 * "Jimmy Eat World released their self-titled debut album" → "Jimmy Eat World released their self-titled debut studio album"
 * "promoters,and venues to book shows across the country." → "promoters, and venues to book shows across the United States."
 * "contacted the band asking" → "contacted the band and asked"
 * "check out Sense Field, however," → "check out Sense Field; however,"
 * "could hear. The band mentioned" → "could hear, with the band responding by mentioning"
 * "a staff member at Capitol Records" → "a staff member at Capitol"
 * "had known since the seventh grade, replaced him." → "had been best friends with since the seventh grade, replaced Porter." since the source mentions that specifically

Production

 * Retitle to Recording and production
 * "to record their forthcoming album," → "to record 'Static Prevails,"
 * Wikilink record label
 * Wikilink 7" vinyl per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * "new songs, and rework others guided" → "new songs and rewrite others, being guided"
 * Wikilink Mesa, Arizona
 * "at Big Fish, in Encinitas, California." → "at Big Fish in Encinitas, California." with the wikilink
 * "who had previously produced" → "who had previously produced for"
 * "Jimmy Eat World were" → "the band were"
 * Add a source at the end of the sentence to confirm the band as producers because [7] does not directly mention this
 * ""Seventeen" it initially featured the chorus lyric "You're only seventeen"," → ""Seventeen", it initially featured the chorus line "You're only seventeen";" with the target
 * "mixed almost all the tracks, except" → "mixed all of the tracks, apart from" with the target
 * "with assistant engineer Cappy Japngie." → "with Cappy Japngie serving as an assistant engineer."
 * "Captiol insisted Rothrock and Schnapf mix these tracks" → "Captiol Records insisted on Rothrock and Schnapf mixing the tracks"
 * "to send the songs" → "to send them"
 * "mastered the recordings at Precision Mastering" → "mastered all of the recordings at Precision Mastering, while" with the target

Composition

 * "from the band's" → "from Jimmy Eat World's"
 * Target pop punk to Pop-punk
 * Mention Rocket from the Crypt as well as NOFX and J Church 10
 * [11] should be directly before [12] since refs should come after punctuation
 * "still very powerful."" → "still very powerful"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * "Unlike their previous album," → "Unlike the band's previous album,"
 * The participation of the members being split on the other records is not sourced
 * "the accordion, and" → "the accordion and"
 * "Kidd played an" → "while Kidd played an"
 * "The opening track "Thinking, That's All" and" → "The opening track, "Thinking, That's All", and"
 * "were screamo-esque songs," → "are screamo-esque songs,"
 * "evoked Texas Is the Reason" → "evokes Texas Is the Reason"
 * ""Call It in the Air" with its punk-esque sound earned it a" → ""Call It in the Air", with its punk-esque sound, earned a"
 * Remove wikilink on Sense Field
 * "Tracks Like "Seventeen"," → "Tracks such as "Seventeen","
 * Target indie label to Independent record label
 * "on their split" → "following Jimmy Eat World's split" but are you sure this shouldn't be in the following section?
 * The early version of "Digits" is from the split mentioned in the Background section; I just put it here as something to say about the song. Yeepsi (talk) 13:27, 7 February 2021 (UTC)


 * "The closing track "Anderson Mesa" features" → "The closing track, "Anderson Mesa", features"
 * Target string arrangement to String section

Release and promotion

 * "After handing in the finished album," → "After the band handed in Static Prevails,"
 * ""bummed ... Just guys" → ""bummed [...] Just guys" since this how you represent skipping part of a quote
 * "toured the west coast in anticipation of their new album" → "toured the West Coast of the US in anticipation of the album"
 * "Capitol Records released Static Prevails" → "Capitol released Static Prevails"
 * Target Denver, Colorado to Denver
 * Target vinyl to Phonograph record
 * Should it be "featured" and "included", or is the vinyl version still available?
 * This particular version (with the different artwork) isn't available anymore; later versions used the CD artwork (the one in the infobox). Yeepsi (talk) 13:27, 7 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Target CD to Compact disc
 * Target B-side to A-side and B-side
 * "along the west coast; later the band" → "along the West; later, the band"
 * "with Smoking Popes and" → "with the Smoking Popes and"
 * "the band embarked on" → "Jimmy Eat World embarked on"
 * "Capitol Records felt the" → "Capitol felt the"
 * "would work in the movie" → "would work in the film"
 * Mention that Clarity is their third studio album
 * Wikilink bonus tracks per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * Mention that Futures is Jimmy Eat World's fifth studio album

Reception

 * Ratings box looks good
 * Fix MOS:QUOTE issues throughout this section
 * "Mike DaRonco stated," → "Mike DaRonco stated that"
 * "It had" → "According to him, the album has"
 * Mention the name of The New Rolling Stone Album Guide reviewer; if not known, identify as the staff
 * "said it was" → "called it"
 * "meant ironically" as" → "meant ironically", as"
 * "The music" → "In his eyes, the music"
 * "Michael Carriere views" → "Michael Carriere viewed"
 * Identify the name of The A.V. Club writer

Track listing

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION

Personnel

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed, another great effort on your part with this nomination! --K. Peake 12:29, 7 February 2021 (UTC)
 * Done. Yeepsi (talk) 13:27, 7 February 2021 (UTC)
 * ✅ time, you got to it in under an hour; top job as expected! --K. Peake 13:49, 7 February 2021 (UTC)