Talk:Statue of John Plankinton/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:37, 21 August 2020 (UTC)

Taking this review. MWright96 (talk) 20:37, 21 August 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * "is a six-foot lifelike representation" - please use the undefined undefined template on the text in bold
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 17:52, 22 August 2020 (UTC)


 * "It took the sculptor six months to make" - mention the sculptor's name on the first mention
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 17:52, 22 August 2020 (UTC)


 * Wikilink Plankinton Arcade to the appropriate article
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 17:52, 22 August 2020 (UTC)


 * "he latest redevelopment of the property occurred in 1980-1982" - 1980 to 1982
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 17:52, 22 August 2020 (UTC)


 * "and placed on a 15-foot pedestal" - same issue as the first point in this section
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 17:52, 22 August 2020 (UTC)

Background

 * Mention what Plankinton was on the first mention of him in this section
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:17, 22 August 2020 (UTC)


 * "had already done statues for the Plankinton family so was commissioned" - think there is a comma missing between "family" and "so"
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:17, 22 August 2020 (UTC)


 * "Park made the six-foot bronze statue" - same issue as the first and fifth points in the lead section
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:17, 22 August 2020 (UTC)


 * "and originally promoted by businessman" - was originally
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:17, 22 August 2020 (UTC)


 * "It had billiard and bowling" - think there is a word or two missing from this portion of text
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:17, 22 August 2020 (UTC)


 * "The property was again renamed and then called Shops of Grand Avenue" - the word in bold is not needed in my opinion
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:17, 22 August 2020 (UTC)


 * "The latest redesign of the property in 1980–1982" - between 1980 and 1982
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:17, 22 August 2020 (UTC)


 * "Grand Avenue was the 19th century prestigious street name where the property is located" - Grand Avenue was the name of a 19th-century prestigious street
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:17, 22 August 2020 (UTC)


 * "and is now Wisconsin Avenue." - now called
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:17, 22 August 2020 (UTC)


 * "The statue on its 15-foot pedestal" - similiar issue to the first and fifth points in the lead section
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:17, 22 August 2020 (UTC)


 * "and seen by hundreds daily." - and is viewed
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:17, 22 August 2020 (UTC)