Talk:Stephen the Great/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: SpartaN (talk · contribs) 20:27, 17 June 2017 (UTC)

The article is definitely broad and well-referenced. Mostly just copy editing to improve prose. While 90% of the article reads just fine, those few sentences with slight prose issues are all I'd say needs work on. Note also that I don't know anything about the history of Moldavia, and only checked to make sure the information in this article is consistent with that of our other articles on the subject: I saw no factual errors. A couple prose issues I fixed myself. Hope I'm not being too picky. to: With the assistance of Vlad, Stephen broke into Moldavia at the head of an army 6,000 strong in the spring of 1457. to: Peter Aaron subsequently left Poland for Hungary and settled in Székely Land, Transylvania. What are the privileges he confirmed? The right to conduct business? to: Stephen breached Székely Land multiple times in 1461. (broke into sounds more like a burglary in my opinion) to: Stephen was seriously wounded during the siege, suffering an injury on his left calf that would never heal his entire life. to: However, neither the Pope, or any other European power, sent material support to Moldavia. to: Stephen adopted a scorched earth policy, but could not avoid a pitched battle. to: Stephen returned to Moldava, leaving Moldavian troops behind for Vlad's protection. to: To strengthen his international position, Stephen signed a new treaty with Poland on 22 January 1479, promising to personally swear fealty to Casimir IV in Colomeea (now Kolomyia, Ukraine) on that day specified by the king six months later. to: He promised to renew the annual tribute in May 1480 that he had stopped paying in 1473. Taking advantage of the peace, Stephen made preparations for a new confrontation with the Ottoman Empire. to: Matthias Corvinus signed a five-year truce with Bayezid II in October 1483. ("..signed a truce for five years.." sounds like he was signing it for five years) to:The truce applied to all Moldavia, with the exception of the Moldavian ports. After these changes I'll pass the article. I recommend that after fixing the citation needed tags that you take the article to A-class. A lot of work went into the article and I never realized Moldavia defeated the Ottomans so many times. I always thought it was Poland and Venice who were the main defenders of "Christendom" after the Byzantines fell. SpartaN (talk) 20:27, 17 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "With the assistance of Vlad, Stephen broke into Moldavia at the head of an army of 6,000 strong in the spring of 1457."
 * "Peter Aaron subsequently left Poland for Hungary and settled in Székely Land in Transylvania."
 * "A year later, Stephen confirmed the privileges of the merchants of Lvov..."
 * "Stephen broke into Székely Land more than once in 1461."
 * "During the siege, Stephen was seriously wounded on his left calf, a wound that did not heal to the end of his life."
 * it only needs to be mentioned that chilia is now Kiliya in Ukraine once.
 * "However, neither the Pope nor other European powers sent material support to Moldavia."
 * "Stephen adopted the scorched earth policy, but he could not avoid joining a pitched battle."
 * "Stephen returned to Moldavia, but left Moldavian troops behind to protect Vlad."
 * "To strengthen his international position, Stephen signed a new treaty with Poland on 22 January 1479, promising Casimir IV to personally swear fealty to him in Colomeea (now Kolomyia in Ukraine) on the day that the king specified six months ahead."
 * " He promised to again pay a yearly tribute in May 1480.[76] Taking advantage of the peace, Stephen made preparations to a new confrontation with the Ottoman Empire."
 * "Matthias Corvinus signed a truce for five years with Bayezid II in October 1483."
 * "The truce covered Moldavia, with the exception of the Moldavian ports."
 * There's a couple citation needed tags that you should work on, but not enough to fail the article. Those sentences may very well be covered by citations at the end of the paragraphs anyway.
 * , thank you for your comprehensive review. I highly appreciate your hard work. I changed the text of the article mostly in accordance with your above proposals. Please let me know if any further action is needed to improve the article. Borsoka (talk) 17:23, 18 June 2017 (UTC)
 * Looks good. Saw one instance of double negative which I just fixed myself. Will pass now.