Talk:Steve Bennett (California politician)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Mike Christie (talk · contribs) 21:37, 27 August 2022 (UTC)

I'll review this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 21:37, 27 August 2022 (UTC)

Image is appropriately tagged. -- Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 22:03, 27 August 2022 (UTC)
 * What makes joincalifornia.com a reliable source?
 * Some of the early life section seems to be needlessly in past tense -- I would suggest making it "he has four children" and "He admires".
 * Can we get any dates, even approximate, for the "Activism" section?
 * Suggest giving a few words inline explaining what Proposition 187 was about.
 * The sentence about the eight-foot bubble ordinance is long and hard to parse; suggest rephrasing, perhaps as two sentences.
 * "Measure H was passed": be explicit that this is Bennett's proposal.
 * Done. I replaced the JoinCalifornia link with a CalMatters link. You can see its leadership here. Jon698 (talk) 02:13, 30 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Just making sure that the ping was sent since I didn't get the notification of it being sent. Jon698 (talk) 02:14, 30 August 2022 (UTC)

Passing. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 10:56, 30 August 2022 (UTC)