Talk:Steve Cherry/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 07:41, 3 March 2021 (UTC)

Picking this up, review coming as soon as possible. Kosack (talk) 07:41, 3 March 2021 (UTC)

Lead

 * Consider adding professional to the opening sentence. It's generally considered the norm to distinguish the fact that a footballer played at such a level.
 * Sorted.--EchetusXe 01:04, 4 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Link cap to Cap (sport).
 * Sorted.--EchetusXe 01:04, 4 March 2021 (UTC)

Derby County

 * "However Derby were relegated at the end of the 1979–80 season", the however is probably unnecessary here I would say.
 * Sorted.--EchetusXe 01:04, 4 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "in goal for four Fourth Division and four FA Cup", sentence is a little repetitive with four uses of the same sound. Perhaps something like "played in eight matches, four in the Fourth Division and..."?
 * Sorted.--EchetusXe 01:04, 4 March 2021 (UTC)


 * What happened with the "comic goal"? Seems strange to mention it but not describe what happened.
 * I've removed the comic bit, he just played poorly in an embarrassing defeat.--EchetusXe 01:04, 4 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Third paragraph ends without a ref.
 * Sorted.--EchetusXe 01:04, 4 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "two-time Ballon d'Or winner", this borders on a WP:PEACOCK term for me. Is it relevant to Cherry that he had won these? I'm not so sure.
 * Sorted.--EchetusXe 01:04, 4 March 2021 (UTC)

Walsall

 * "to reach the third round of the FA Cup tie against First Division", this seems a little muddled with the addition of tie and the remaining part of the sentence.
 * Removed erroneous word.--EchetusXe 01:04, 4 March 2021 (UTC)

Plymouth Argyle

 * Plymouth are linked before this, so repeating is a bit of an WP:OVERLINK.
 * Sorted.--EchetusXe 01:04, 4 March 2021 (UTC)

Notts County

 * "only four of their next 19 games", it's generally advised to avoid switching between words and digits in the same sentence with comparable figures.
 * Sorted.--EchetusXe 01:04, 4 March 2021 (UTC)

Statistics

 * Minor point, but it's generally preferred to keep refs in numerical order. The sources for the table here are slightly out of sync.
 * Sorted.--EchetusXe 01:04, 4 March 2021 (UTC)


 * His FA Cup apps for Derby add up to 12 but only 8 are listed in the subtotal. I don't know if that throws any other totals out of sync?
 * The Derby totals seem off as well, he's given 89 total apps in the subtotal but I count 93 in the season-by-season breakdown. That's probably related to the above point.
 * Derby only played one FA Cup game that season, must have been a typo.--EchetusXe 01:04, 4 March 2021 (UTC)