Talk:Steve Masakowski

First crack
Plenty to talk about here. Maybe the person who wrote this, and others who want to edit, will get a sense of how an entry can be done better. It's important to remember that this is an encyclopedia, not an advertisement for people you like.


 * In the first paragraph: How do I know Hank Mackie is the best guitar teacher in town? He might be, but there's no way to know that objectively, and this isn't the sort of sentence to put in an entry. Second, I would use the name of the teacher only if he were well-known.
 * Then a student, Phil deGruy, is named. Why?
 * "He became seriously interested in music." He's either interested in music or he isn't. Seriously.
 * "Steve worked primarily as a bass guitarist". Another hedge. If you say "he worked as a bass guitarist" you can still leave open the possiblity that he did other work. If the other work is significant, you can mention it.
 * "Steve" First name. I see this in many music biographies that I edit. The person who wrote the entry, the writer or editor, will switch to first person as though they were old friends. It's funny really, to care that much about a subject that you believe you are on a first-name basis. But obviously you can't have that on Wikipedia.

Put simply, plenty to do here. Interested readers might want to take a look at these sections of Wikipedia's documentation.


 * Biographies of living persons
 * Neutral point of view
 * Notability
 * What Wikipedia is not
 * Article size
 * Featured articles

–Vmavanti (talk) 23:05, 28 August 2016 (UTC)