Talk:Steve Morrison (American football)/GA1

GA Review
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 * He now serves as the defensive coordinator for the Western Michigan Broncos football team. - it needs to be elaborated that whether this is college or professional football
 * I hope I did not go overboard in expanding this sentence.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 05:56, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nope, its fine.-- TRU    CO   21:26, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * After retiring from professional football as a player, he began a coaching career by performing as defensive coordinator for Michigan High School Athletic Association football champion Brother Rice High School (his high school alma mater) for two years.  - this makes no sense, the punctuation throw the flow of the sentence (read it aloud and you will see), reword
 * How is it now?--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 06:00, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Much better.-- TRU    CO   21:26, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Early years
 * He was inducted in the 1995 Hall of Fame class that included among others Shawn Respert - the among others should be after Shawn Respert with a comma after Respert
 * O.K.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 06:09, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * As a junior who played both fullback and linebacker, he was sidelined for the remainder of the season with a knee injury in his third game, but the team went 7–2 in for the season despite his loss. - "injury" not loss
 * O.K.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 06:09, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * The team had been ranked as the number three high school team in the Detroit Area by the Detroit Free Press in its pre-season poll and Morrison had been hailed as a blue chip athlete entering his senior season in the same pre-season summary. - split this sentence, its too long
 * O.K.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 06:09, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * He has since been passed by Jarrett Irons and Sam Sword and stands fifth with 220 tackles. - comma before the second and
 * O.K.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 06:09, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Professional Career
 * The National Football League (NFL) needs to be spelled out with the acronym.
 * I put this in the LEAD.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 06:23, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Despite the playoff success, they changed coaches as Lindy Infante took them back to the 1996-97 NFL playoffs with a 9-7 record, only to fall in the wildcard game to the Steelers again. - comma before as
 * O.K.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 06:23, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * In 1997 and 1998, the team had losing seasons although Morrison started more games as his career progressed. - comma before although
 * O.K.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 06:23, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * How did he end his NFL career and transitioned to his high school defensive coordinator career? Its not clear in the prose.
 * I think the sentence I put in the wrong place confused you. After moving the sentence, the prose now says he was waived in 1999 and began coaching in 2000.  That seems pretty clear to me.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 06:45, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * In 2008, after defensive coordinator, Bill Miller left to be the Louisville Cardinals football linebacker coach, - remove the comma before the name of Miller and the final comma should be a period
 * O.K.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 06:45, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * So what's his followup now that it is 2009?
 * In the absence of news a coach is assumed to continue to the next season. He continues to be Defensive Coordinator until there is news to the contrary.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 07:18, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Okay.-- TRU    CO   21:26, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * It needs to be made clear that his career in college football is part of the NCAA, etc.
 * O.K. done in LEAD.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 06:48, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * A copyedit of the entire article is needed.
 * Personal life
 * This needs to be expanded substantially.
 * I hope I added enough.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 08:03, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Position coaches, Mid major Defensive coordinators and non-All Pro football players get little media attention. This article is a fairly complete synthesis of WP:RSs.
 * Sources are fine and the personal life is acceptable now :)-- TRU    CO   21:26, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
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 * Passing GAN - comments resolved to meet WP:WIAGA.-- TRU    CO   21:26, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
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 * Passing GAN - comments resolved to meet WP:WIAGA.-- TRU    CO   21:26, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
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 * Passing GAN - comments resolved to meet WP:WIAGA.-- TRU    CO   21:26, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Passing GAN - comments resolved to meet WP:WIAGA.-- TRU    CO   21:26, 22 January 2009 (UTC)