Talk:Stewart Friesen/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 07:51, 27 November 2020 (UTC)

Will review. MWright96 (talk) 07:51, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
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Lead

 * References in the lead should be avoided per MOS:LEADCITE ✅  NASCARfan0548  ↗  23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * "driving the No. 52 Toyota Tundra for Halmar Friesen Racing." - consider using the abbr template on the text in bold to tell the reader that it is the car number ✅  NASCARfan0548  ↗  23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * "driving the No. 44 for HFR." - I believe it would help to clarify that the No. 44 is a vehicle for the uninitated ✅  NASCARfan0548  ↗  23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)

Early years

 * "Friesen got hooked on racing early in life," - the text in bold is informal ✅, changed "got hooked" to "started."  NASCARfan0548  ↗  23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * "After racing go-karts," - this portion of text needs a citation verifying that its correct

I need help with this one,. What citation can I find?  NASCARfan0548  ↗  23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Any more details on his achievements in go-karting?

I have no idea.  NASCARfan0548  ↗  23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * "Sometimes, Friesen runs NASCAR and dirt on the same day." - On occassion, ✅  NASCARfan0548  ↗  23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * "He maintains an active presence on New York dirt tracks like Fonda, Ransomville, Five Mile Point and Utica-Rome." - such as ✅  NASCARfan0548  ↗  23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)

Gander RV & Outdoors Truck Series

 * Wikilink the term grid to the relevant article ✅ <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * "and Friesen's maiden voyage resulted in a 28th-place finish." - more formal; debut race ✅ <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * "Friesen recorded three top twenty finishes," - 20 ✅ <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * "Friesen announced that he would run the full 2017 season in the Halmar Friesen Racing" - the acryomns of Halmar Freisen Racing need to be in parentheses ✅ <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * "following the first seven races of the season, HFR announced it would undergo a two-race hiatus before returning at Kentucky in July." - repetition of "race" ✅ <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Wikilink Kentucky to Kentucky Speedway ✅ <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * "At Eldora, Friesen won the pole and stayed in the position for the start of the feature after winning his heat race." - qualified on the pole position and remained in the place ✅ <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * "He led over half the laps" - more than ✅ <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * "No. 52 with Tommy Baldwin Jr. coming on as a team manager." - clarify that the No. 52 was a truck for the uninitated ✅ <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * The third paragraph is uncited and needs to be verified by reliable source that explicitly mention the information contained within in

I need help with that,. What is the best source for that? <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * "After advancing to the playoffs and a best finish of 2nd 3 times throughout the year," - second on three occassions ✅ <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * "he finished 7th in final points after being eliminated in the Round of 8." - seventh in the final points standings ✅ <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * "At Kansas Speedway in spring," - avoid using seasons per MOS:SEASONS ✅ <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * "but ran out of fuel with three laps to go due to a pit communication on the previous pit stop," - perhaps expand what happened exactly during the pit communication error, is the following quote good enough: "in which the fuelman did not put enough fuel in the truck"? <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * "On August 1, 2019, Friesen finally broke through" - try rewording the text in bold to something more formal ✅ <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * "Friesen claimed his 2nd career victory and 1st at an oval track by winning at Phoenix after passing Brandon Jones with 4 laps to go." - achieved his second career victory and his first on an oval track by winning at Phoenix after passing Brandon Jones with four laps remaining. ✅ <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * "As a result, Friesen made his first-ever Championship 4 appearance but ultimately finished 11th at Homestead and fourth in the final standings." - needs to be cited to a reliable source that explicitly mentions this statement

I need help with this one,. What is the best source? <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * "Friesen made his first-ever Championship 4 appearance" - qualified for the Championship 4 for the first time ✅ <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * "On the night of the Kansas truck race, Friesen finished second to Mat Williamson in a $53,000-to win race at Port Royal." - repetition of "race" ✅ <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)

Personal life

 * "He eventually attended" - think the word in bold isn't needed ✅ <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Briefly mention Zemeken's occupation for those who do not know what she does

I can't find a source on that. <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * "and dated driver Tony Stewart." - don't think we need the dating likes of one on this encyclopedia ✅ <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * "Friesen currently lives in Sprakers, New York." - avoid using the word in bold per MOS:CURRENTLY ✅ <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)

Motorsports career results: Gander RV & Outdoors Truck Series

 * It needs to be mentioned that the small number below the track name denotes the finishing position Freisen attained ✅ <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * All the columns in the results tables should include the scope="col" after the exclamation symbol per MOS:DTT ✅ <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * The abbrevations No., pts and ref need the abbr template used on them to denote their meaning ✅ <b style="background:#006A4D; padding:2px"> NASCARfan0548  ↗ </b> 23:09, 27 November 2020 (UTC)