Talk:Stolta Stad!/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:09, 22 November 2021 (UTC)

I am going to review this, though may get confused at parts since I'm used to taking on traditional song articles. --K. Peake 08:09, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Many thanks. I guess it's traditional in most senses, though with spoken sections it's a little unusual. Happy to help in any way I can. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:46, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Your welcome and if I have not understood anything properly below, don't feel afraid to make me aware... good luck! --K. Peake 11:45, 22 November 2021 (UTC)

Lead

 * Img looks good!
 * Thanks!
 * Remove comma after the bracketed title
 * Done.
 * The best-known and best-loved part should be in a different sentence from the first one
 * Edited.
 * "It combines spoken" → "The composition combines spoken"
 * Edited.
 * "and song (in Swedish)." → "and a song (in Swedish)."
 * Edited.
 * Mention the narrator and lyrical content for appropriate detail in lead
 * Added.
 * "of its capital city," → "of the country's capital city,"
 * Done.
 * If any of the covers are notable, mention them here too
 * Added.

Context

 * Retitle to Background
 * Done.
 * "overlaid on map" → "overlaid on the map" on the img text
 * Done.
 * Pipe Swedish song tradition to Scandinavian ballad tradition
 * Done.
 * [1] should be solely at the end of the sentence
 * Moved.
 * The cittern instrument is not sourced
 * It was, but added another.
 * Wikilink pastorales
 * Done.
 * "during the eighteenth century." → "during the 17th century." per MOS:NUM and because you mentioned years in the 1700s before
 * That would simply be misleading, the 17th century began in 1600. I've said "in Bellman's time.
 * Sorry that was a typo, I do know that each century is actually one ahead of the multiple of 100 so write during the 18th century. --K. Peake 21:46, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Well I've replaced it anyway.


 * Pipe Bacchus to Dionysus
 * Done.
 * "sport in Stockholm's" → "play in Stockholm's" to be more encyclopaedic
 * Done.
 * Most of the juxtaposition sentence does not appear to be sourced and humorous is not neutral language
 * It's reliably sourced, and one of the most salient facts about Bellman's work.
 * I will let this slide, to be honest. --K. Peake 21:46, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks.

Spoken sections

 * Wikilink motley
 * Done.
 * "old town, Gamla Stan," → "old town Gamla stan,"
 * Done.
 * Start a new sentence at "They are speaking"
 * Done.
 * Pipe dancing bear to Tame bear
 * Done.
 * "to defecate; people are" → "to defecate, people are"
 * Done.
 * Pipe trumps to Trump (card games)
 * Done.

Music and verse form

 * Add actual text on the audio sample because it needs this to comply with WP:NFCCP
 * Added.
 * Pipe rhythming pattern to Rhyme scheme
 * Done.
 * "a musician, and one" → "a musician and one"
 * Comma is correct.
 * Pipe key to Key (music)
 * Done.
 * Shouldn't "among the epistles call" use "are" before it?
 * The grammar is "only [these two] call for...".
 * Oh, alright. --K. Peake 21:46, 22 November 2021 (UTC)


 * ""Regardez ces traits" from" → ""Regardez ces traits" on"
 * Said "in".
 * No problem --K. Peake 21:46, 22 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Img looks good!
 * Thanks!

Lyrics

 * "ships, flags and" → "ships, flags, and"
 * Done.
 * "drinking and song," → "drinking and a song,"
 * No, song as a quantity, an element of the scene, not as a single item.
 * Thanks for the clarification --K. Peake 21:46, 22 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Wikilink stanza
 * Done.
 * Why is no source provided for the para?
 * Done.
 * Hendrik Willem Van Loon → Hendrik Willem van Loon
 * Done.
 * Shouldn't Cadiz be written as Cádiz instead?
 * Done. Actually it's debatable as Bellman wrote Cadix in Swedish.
 * Pipe Spaniard to Merchant ship
 * Done.

Reception

 * Retitle to Reception and legacy
 * Done, but "and" in a heading is a retrograde step really.
 * Remove wikilink on Stockholm for the img
 * Done.
 * "no. 65, "So I look out at the shore", which includes the lines" → "no. 65 "So I look out at the shore", which includes the lyrics:"
 * Done.
 * "dramatic technique, the ability" → "dramatic technique; the ability" if this ability is the technique
 * The ability is the technique, but the semicolon doesn't work as it must introduce a clause with an active verb.
 * Are you sure a colon isn't the appropriate way to do this? --K. Peake 21:46, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
 * I'm perfectly happy to use a colon in such a context, but a hundred gnomish editors "know" otherwise. If you want to use your "minor edits" rights as reviewer to change it I won't object.


 * Wikilink the gospel
 * Well we could, but it's "the gospel of brandy-drinking" so perhaps the link would be a bit of an Easter Egg!
 * "but just one of" → "but merely one of"
 * Done.
 * "all Stockholm depicters."" → "all Stockholm depicters"." per MOS:QUOTE and this is one sentence, so merge with the above para which it has relevancy to
 * Done.
 * "Soundscape, it suggests, turns" → "According to the society, the soundscape turns"
 * It's better as it is.
 * Merge the Haga-Brunnsviken Nytt sentence with the above para per short length
 * Done.
 * The last performance shows notability per the costume, but actual info is needed for the others to meet WP:SONGCOVER
 * Fixed, adding description.
 * Merge the tour company para with the above one, as both are about legacy
 * Done.

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; that went better than I expected! --K. Peake 11:45, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Many thanks, I think I've addressed all the items now. Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:11, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Thank you; I have left some responses above. --K. Peake 21:46, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks. I think we're complete now; the colon is up to you if you want to risk it! Chiswick Chap (talk) 22:10, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
 * ✅ time, I changed that part but re-worded slightly rather than adding a colon. --K. Peake 09:03, 23 November 2021 (UTC)