Talk:Stop That Tank!

Rewrite required
An overly detailed plot section, no production area; and other aspects of sourcing needs to be redressed. Comments? FWiW Bzuk (talk) 22:24, 6 March 2016 (UTC)

Hi, allow me to chime in here. This article is an assessed piece of work for a module I am teaching at the University of Huddersfield. I agree there are issues with it, but since the deadline for submission of coursework was Feb 16, and the grade and feedback is due tomorrow, I fear there is little chance the student will rewrite it. NB there is a section named "Production" at the end of the article, so I am not sure what "no production area" refers to in your comment. Alexander von Lunen (talk) 11:31, 7 March 2016 (UTC)
 * The original version is still available in the work history of the article so that the student can still submit this. The section on production was recently crafted out of the article's main body of text. As much as possible, the original "author's voice" is being preserved, but there are lots of areas of concern, especially in the presentation of the author's analysis and synthesis that does not match the film's content. FWiW Bzuk (talk) 12:17, 7 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Hi, sorry, got completely sidelined by other teaching duties etc, so I forgot to get back to this. Thanks for your feedback, much appreciated. I am not sure whether I agree with the points raised re analysis and synthesis, but anyway, the work has been assessed, so I have no leverage to ask the student to re-write I am afraid. Alexander von Lunen (talk) 16:18, 3 May 2016 (UTC)