Talk:Storrie Fire/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 05:20, 22 February 2023 (UTC)

Looks interesting! I will be able to review this later today.  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 05:20, 22 February 2023 (UTC)


 * Thank you very much! I appreciate you taking the time. Penitentes (talk) 15:11, 22 February 2023 (UTC)
 * No problem :) Okay! I have placed this article on hold for now and left some comments below. Please ping me once you have addressed my concerns otherwise I may not respond. Thanks,  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 17:17, 22 February 2023 (UTC)
 * I think I've addressed all the comments you left—happy to change anything else should it be necessary! Thanks for the thorough review, I think I agree with pretty much everything. Penitentes (talk) 16:39, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * Thanks! Glad to know my comments are valid. Well, I think that is everything; the article looks fantastic! I am now pleased to pass this article for GA status per your changes implemented. Congrats! Also, it is good to see more editors working on fire-related articles :)  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 23:04, 23 February 2023 (UTC)

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Prose

 * The article switches between using U.S. and United States; recommend one variant for consistency.
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 15:50, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * I would remove the citations from the lead per MOS:LEAD. All three of them are cited later in the body.
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 15:50, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * I would perhaps mention how they caused the fire in the lead.
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 15:50, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * Wikilink Sierra Nevada.
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 15:50, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * "amounted to US$22 million." – the US prefix is unnecessary here per MOS:$. Same concern for the infobox.
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 15:50, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * Wikilink Feather River Canyon, Sierra Nevada and Lake Oroville in § Background.
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 15:50, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * "the 2008 BTU Lightning Complex," – missing Fire.
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 15:50, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * "(the largest single wildfire in recorded California history)." – I reckon this could work with a comma instead of the parentheses.
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 15:50, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * "2012 Chips Fire" – change to "Chips Fire" as it was just mentioned. Also:
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 15:50, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * Do the same as above with the second mention of the 2021 Dixie Fire.
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 15:50, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * "When the fire was first spotted on a steep slope near Storrie" – do we know what time this was?
 * ✅ - Sources are unfortunately not more specific than "Thursday afternoon", but I've included that phrase now. - Penitentes (talk) 16:37, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * The image would look better moved directly under § August 18–31.
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 16:37, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * "and the brunt of the direct attack" – brunt sounds slightly informal; recommend rephrasing (but, ignore me if this is correct in firefighting jargon, in which I am unfamiliar).
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 16:37, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * "PG&E de-energized" – here is where it should say Pacific Gas & Electric (PG&E); switch this with its mention in § Damage.
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 16:37, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * "The fire spotted more than one mile ahead of the main fire front into the canyon of Indian Creek." – this sentence reads quite jagged.
 * ✅ - Great point. Rephrased and added a wikilink for 'spot fire'. - Penitentes (talk) 16:37, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * "contain the fire's 'heel' near Storrie" – is there perhaps a better word choice available?
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 16:37, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * "by September 5 (more than 5,000 acres (2,000 ha)" – recommend "by September 5, with more than 5,000 acres (2,000 ha)"
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 16:37, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * "also received 2/10ths of an inch of rain" – change to "also received 2/10ths of an inch of rainfall"
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 16:37, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * "over the Labor Day weekend," – could a date range be provided instead for non-American readers?
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 16:37, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * "5,000 acres (2,000 ha) (referred to as an 'island') within" – change to "5,000 acres (2,000 ha)—referred to as an 'island'—within" to avoid two parentheses next to one another.
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 16:37, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * Wikilink holdover fire.
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 16:37, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * § Casualties is too short to be its own section IMO.
 * ✅ - Agreed, I use that as a sort of template guide while writing and often there's enough content to justify its own subsection. Here not so much. Penitentes (talk) 16:37, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * The quotation regarding the Pacific Crest Trial is unnecessary.
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 16:37, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * "was closed August 17 and reopened August 20." – add on as to remain consistent with the rest of the article.
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 16:37, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * "said only about 15% of the watershed area "burned intensely"" – recommend "had "burned intensely""
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 16:37, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * "During the following October," – needs a more specific date as the previous sentence mentions 2019.
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 16:37, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * I also recommend placing the image in § Lawsuit directly under § Settlement so it does not push the section header rightwards.
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 16:37, 23 February 2023 (UTC)

Refs
Passes spotcheck—no concerns with refs 8, 9, 12, 13, 18, 30 or 43. Nice work!

Other
Section formatting, coords, navbox and cats good.
 * Minor nitpick, but move the short description to the tippity-top of the article.
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 14:35, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * Recommend adding template:Use X English.
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 14:35, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * Please add WP:ALT text.
 * ✅ - Penitentes (talk) 14:35, 23 February 2023 (UTC)


 * I've also added a link to Glossary of wildfire terms in the See also section. - Penitentes (talk) 16:37, 23 February 2023 (UTC)
 * Great idea!