Talk:Strip club/GA1

GA Review
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 * Well-written
 * Lead section
 * Too short. See WP:LEAD for more information.
 * Background section
 * How much money is spent in the US on strip club as listed in the second sentence? In the last sentence, "Some clubs..." is WP:WEASEL.
 * Industry and markets subsection.
 * Change $3.1 billion to US$3.1 billion and do the same for the $2.1 Billion in the second sentence of the opening paragraph. For the final sentence of the opening paragraph, for the larger market, is it within the US or in the adult entertainment industry?
 * In the second paragraph's third sentence, spell out NY as New York.
 * In the final paragraph's second sentence, when in 2010 did this take place? Also in the third paragraph, when was the statement of intent issued?
 * Business practices subsection.
 * In the opening sentence of the third paragraph, change "...,bartender and manager for example,..." to ",...such as a bartender and manager,..."
 * Feature and services section
 * Other floor zones subsection.
 * In the lead sentence of the opening section, change "...where the cover charge (if any) is..." to "...where what, if any, cover charge is..."
 * For the lead sentence of the fourth paragraph, "Lap dances can be (and are) performed..." is WP:WEASEL. Fix.
 * Performers and staff
 * List examples of such Feature dancers and porn stars of people who are actually dancers in the opening paragraph.
 * In the third paragraph's opening sentence, "legal" comes across as WP:PEACOCK and WP:WEASEL. Fix.
 * Popular culture section
 * Top clubs subsection.
 * What is the criteria that AskMen.com set? List.
 * Strip clubs and the law section
 * In the lead sentence of the second paragraph, notorious is WP:WEASEL.
 * For the second sentence of the third paragraph, when in early 2010 did Detroit banned fully exposed breasts in strip clubs there?


 * Factually accurate and reliable
 * For references, use WP:CITET for samples. The items listed have items retrieved in April 2010, but what day in April 2010 was this retreived? Specify. See WP:CITE for more details.
 * Three sections in this article are completely lacking references: Features and services, Performers and staff, and the first part of Popular culture. Read Wikipedia policies of WP:NOR. This looks like original research, something that Wikipedia does not allow.
 * Italicize the book title in the External links section.


 * Broad in coverage
 * Covers strip clubs mainly in the US and parts of North America though four strip clubs outside of North America are listed in AskMen.com. Legal issues shown are only for the US. What effects are there outside of the US?


 * Neutral
 * It makes no listing of the effects of people who frequent or work at strip clubs. This includes physical, physiological, psychological, emotional, and finanacial results.


 * Stable
 * 231 edits between 24 April and 9 May 2010 in an effort to get article to GA.


 * Images
 * All images listed are valid though the captions do not list when they were taken. For American locations, spell out the American state. In the image in the Strip club and the law section, the image does not seem relevant to the article. Remove. In the last image, where are the strip clubs located in the image in Baltimore? Specify.


 * Overall
 * Fail. Too many problems with article. Major work required to get it to GA. Chris (talk) 13:31, 10 May 2010 (UTC)

Reviewer: Chris (talk) 13:31, 10 May 2010 (UTC)


 * Overall feedback helpful. Thank you. Review addressed point by point on the article talk page. - Wallanon (talk) 20:39, 5 June 2010 (UTC)