Talk:Stuck Inside of Mobile with the Memphis Blues Again/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:44, 2 April 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

(Criteria marked are unassessed)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):
 * b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a. (reference section):
 * b. (citations to reliable sources):
 * c. (OR):
 * d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * Pass/fail:

For this review, we are reunited after a while! --K. Peake 07:44, 2 April 2023 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Separate the genres using bullet points per Template:Infobox song
 * Write out the rock genre in the body rather than sourcing in the infobox
 * Removed genre from infobox - see comment under Referencing. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:02, 4 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Can you stylize the audio for a song infobox instead?
 * Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:02, 4 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Second infobox looks good, apart from is there supposed to be no singles chronology?
 * Added. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:02, 4 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "which was released on his seventh studio album" → "from his seventh studio album,"
 * You need to write out directly in the body that Dylan wrote the song
 * The lead is not properly sorted into paragraphs; I would recommend running the first up until the 1971 release and the second para from the earlier take onwards, as I will further instruct
 * "All twenty takes of "Stuck Inside of Mobile with the Memphis Blues Again"" → "All 20 takes of the song" per MOS:NUM
 * "also appears on 1971's" → "also appeared on Dylan's second compilation album," with the wikilink and add the year in brackets instead
 * "An earlier take was" → "An earlier take of the song was" since this will be a new para
 * "The song has received a" → ""Stuck Inside of Mobile with the Memphis Blue Again" has received a" and add what was praised about it
 * The praise is quite vague actually, but I've had an attempt at this. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 12:47, 5 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "recorded in May 1976 was included" → "recorded in May 1976 was included on" and introduce the album
 * I've amended the artivle per the points above. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 12:47, 5 April 2023 (UTC)

Recording

 * Retitle to Background and recording
 * Pipe acoustic to Acoustic music
 * "In 1965, he hired" → "In 1965, Dylan hired"
 * "that the recording sessions" → "that the sessions"
 * Wikilink harmonica
 * Pipe Kenneth Buttrey to Kenny Buttrey
 * "All twenty takes of" → "All 20 takes of" per MOS:NUM
 * "This, and four additional takes" does this mean that take and the other four were released on the edition? If not, then I would suggest changing this to mentioning the four takes also being released.
 * Yes, take 13 and four otheres were on the six-disc Deluxe edition. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 14:46, 4 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "when it was in included on" → "when it was included on"
 * All addressed. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 14:46, 4 April 2023 (UTC)

Critical comments

 * Retitle to Analysis and reception
 * "identified several possible influences" → "identifies several possible influences" and for consistency, you should use the same tense throughout unless it's a non-biographical source
 * Start a new sentence at Ma Rainey with "He further notes the influence of" or something similar
 * "that he employed on some of" → "as he employed on some of"
 * Why is "and" used for the preacher + rainman then railroad men + deceased grandfather?
 * "listeners would realise that" → "listeners would realise,"
 * "we all inhabit"." should have the punctuation inside if this is a full sentence per MOS:QUOTE
 * "Dave Margoshes of the considered the song," → "Dave Margoshes considered the song,"
 * Is Crawdaddy supposed to be piped to Crawdaddy (magazine)?
 * "oh-so-accurate refrain."" → "oh-so-accurate refrain"."
 * Not done, as the quote is a full sentence from the source. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 11:23, 5 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Italicise Uncut
 * ""grand statements on" → ""grand statements" on"
 * Addressed all of the comments - I think the tense is now consistent. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 11:23, 5 April 2023 (UTC)

Live performances

 * Pipe Pensacola to Pensacola, Florida
 * "on May 16, 176," → "on May 16, 1976," obviously
 * The three omitted verses part is not mentioned by any of the sources
 * Done - added a source for the omitted verses. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 14:05, 4 April 2023 (UTC) (I later found "excising three verses of 'Memphis Blues Again'" in the Rachlis Rolling Stone article; I think this is what I had originally relied on. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 12:45, 5 April 2023 (UTC)_

Personnel

 * Wikilink Joe South on the img text
 * Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 12:16, 4 April 2023 (UTC)

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; sorry about the lateness, I was having to review on train Wi-Fi. --K. Peake 21:16, 3 April 2023 (UTC)
 * Many thank for a typically thorough review, . Let me know if anything else is required. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 12:48, 5 April 2023 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, this was an ideal pace while I'm on holiday! --K. Peake 20:12, 5 April 2023 (UTC)