Talk:Substitute Teacher (Key & Peele)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: PCN02WPS (talk · contribs) 04:49, 25 January 2024 (UTC)

A favorite of mine. Happy to review this - if you have any interest in returning the favor I have a list of unreviewed nominations here. PCN02WPS ( talk  &#124;  contribs ) 04:49, 25 January 2024 (UTC)

Lead and infobox
 * This is very pedantic, but the image caption in the infobox strikes me as being potentially very slightly incorrect if the character's actual name is "Aaron" and not "A-a-ron"
 * "While taking roll, Garvey states the name of each person in the class" → could potentially give off the impression that he gets through everybody's name, which he does not
 * View count can be updated from YouTube

Plot
 * I'm not sure if this is an actionable point or just a thought, since I'm not sure what to suggest instead, but the formatting for Garvey's pronunciations seems a little unsatisfactory. I'm not entirely convinced throwing IPA in the middle of the paragraph is the best option:

It's just a little clunky and weirdly formal. Interested to hear your thoughts though I suspect your solution will probably end up being best.

Production
 * "Key used his "Gupta"—a term " → I'd move this one sentence up, to be right after the sentence about the emphasis of that first syllable
 * "early for yearbook photographs for their extracurricular clubs" → a bit repetitive with uses of "for"
 * "after telling him that he needs" → ditto with "him" and "he", which also introduce a bit of ambiguity; recommend "after telling Garvey that he needs"
 * "pronounced Jess-see-ca" → "s" in both the first and second syllable respelling seems unnecessary; it seems that this sound wouldn't span two syllables and would make more sense being classified as being part of either the first or the second

Reception and legacy
 * Update dated view count statement
 * "the fourth best" → hyphen
 * "seventh best" → as above
 * "attributed "Substitute Teacher" 's success" → to avoid the awkwardness with the quotes here, you could reword to "attributed the success of the sketch" or something similar
 * "The plot would purportedly involve" → this sounds strange in past tense

Analysis
 * "Qin also highlights" → switch to present tense from past
 * the bit about parallelism is a bit confusing without explanation of the term
 * "professor Kakali Bhattacharya reevaluates" → switch to present tense from past

That's all I have on the first read-through, take your time in getting to these! PCN02WPS ( talk  &#124;  contribs ) 05:15, 25 January 2024 (UTC)
 * All issues resolved. As for the pronunciations, a footnote could work, but I see no issue with the current implementation. elijahpepe@wikipedia (he/him) 05:45, 25 January 2024 (UTC)
 * After looking at the pronunciations again I'd agree. The spot checks I did all look good; awesome job with the article overall. PCN02WPS  ( talk  &#124;  contribs ) 07:36, 25 January 2024 (UTC)