Talk:Subterranean Jungle/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Вик Ретлхед (talk · contribs) 09:49, 7 June 2014 (UTC)

Beginning the review. Glad to be working with a great friend of mine again.


 * Lead
 * "The album begin with two cover songs"→begins (third person singular)


 * addiction of alcohol→alcohol addiction


 * The cn template should be dealt with.


 * "spawned"→released, to be more "encyclopedic" in the intro


 * Conception
 * album art→artwork


 * recording process→recording (process adds nothing)


 * Compositions and lyrics
 * would later be covered by rock band Green Day→suggest writing this in past simple ("was covered") and omitting Green Day's genre (they are punk rock as far as I know)
 * I changed it to The album's third track, "Outsider," was written by Dee Dee and in 2002, it was covered by Green Day on Shenanigans.


 * delink music journalist


 * "—The song"→perhaps ";" would fit better the purpose? (with small "t" of course)


 * fan-base→fanbase
 * I put fandom instead, since I believe it is more encyclopedic as it has its own entry.


 * be consistent with the quote marks per WP:MOSLQ
 * Can you point out specific examples of this? I could not find any myself but I may be overlooking them.
 * Nothing serious. It can stay the way it is.


 * Release and reception
 * Robert Christgau said→wrote, since the column appeared in The Village Voice


 * The following personnel can be verified with AllMusic→Credits are adapted from Allmusic


 * Personnel
 * The following credits have are adapted from AllMusic→Credits are adapted from Allmusic

OK, review is done, I'm happy to pass the article. I smell another good topic here.--Retrohead (talk) 20:01, 8 June 2014 (UTC)