Talk:Sucker Punch Productions/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: IceWelder (talk · contribs) 16:55, 20 August 2022 (UTC)

Will review shortly. IceWelder &#91; &#9993; &#93; 16:55, 20 August 2022 (UTC)


 * Infobox & Lead
 * Does the ordering of the founder represent anything specific? If not, consider ordering alphabetically by last name.
 * Modify "first-party video game developer" per MOS:SEAOFBLUE.
 * The acquisition sentence is duplicated. Reduce the first occurrence to just mentioning that the company is part of PlayStation Studios. You could also mention the "first-party" bit here instead of the first sentence.
 * Highly doubtful that "Growjo" is a reliable source.
 * Should the founding month also be mentioned in the lead?
 * Link video game industry.
 * "well-received" -> "well received" as it is not used as an adjective.
 * "The team approached Sony Computer Entertainment to publish the game which was an unexpected commercial success that then spawned a franchise with two sequels:" - Slightly ambiguous. Consider:
 * "The team approached Sony Computer Entertainment to publish the game, which became an unexpected commercial success and spawned a franchise with two sequels:"
 * "open world comic book-inspired superhero game" -> "open-world, comic book-inspired superhero game". Consider linking comic book.
 * "fastest selling" -> "fastest-selling".


 * History – Founding and Rocket
 * "The brand name was created from one of several names proposed (but unused) by Microsoft." - Clarify that they were not by Microsoft but by the founders during their time at Microsoft, as well was what they originally intended to use these names for (project codenames).
 * The quote "as long as it isn't Sucker Punch." is not found in the associated source.
 * "Seeing the huge success of games like Oddworld: Abe's Oddysee on PlayStation," - The source seemingly does not mention the game's success.
 * "... code-named Puzzle Factory, this first game was ..." - This should be two separate sentences.
 * "The founders pitched the project to publishers ... The team pitched the game to publishers" - Rephrase to reduce repetition.
 * "They also pitched it to Sony, who declined since Sprocket was made for the Nintendo 64, one of PlayStation's competitors." - Link Sony and clarify that they made the PlayStation.
 * When Ubisoft signed onto Sprocket, it was still called "Ubi Soft".
 * Change '"tepid."' -> '"tepid".' per MOS:LQ. This also applies to all later occurrences.


 * History – Sly Cooper success
 * "At that time, the most successful platform games were the ones released by console manufacturers." - It should be mentioned that this is Fleming's observation, not necessarily a fact.
 * Since Sony being the PlayStation maker should have already been addressed in the prior section, it can be removed (or vastly simplified) here.
 * "Development of the game lasted for 3 years" - Not found in the adjacent source but seems to be in ref #7.
 * "11 and a half months" -> "11-and-a-half months".


 * History – Infamous and acquisition by Sony
 * "The studio pitched four different projects" -> "The studio pitched four projects".
 * Add missing comma in "True Hero, which would ultimately become Infamous[,] had a development team of 60 people."
 * "the team could have opted to request" -> "the team could have requested".
 * The claims in both of the above two sentences are apparently not in the source given.
 * "open world" -> "open-world".
 * "three and a half" -> "three-and-a-half".
 * The last few sentences in the first paragraph have no source attached.
 * "It had been an independent company until August 2011" - This seems redundant since the preceding text never mentions it being bought up. Simplify: "Sony announced in August 2011 that ..."
 * "The acquisition talks went on for about two years." and the Foster City Studio claim are not in the adjacent source but appear in the interview cited therein, which you already have as ref #10. Since Destructoid is situational anyway, consider replacing it entirely.
 * "With Sony's support and funding, the studio continued to make Infamous games, releasing the standalone expansion Festival of Blood in October 2011." - Needs a source (at least for the release date).
 * Link PlayStation 4.


 * History – Ghost of Tsushima
 * Link "Scottish folk heroes" to e.g. Scottish mythology.
 * "and a playable prototype named Prophecy, which was created in 2015 or 2016 and leaked in 2020, is set in a steampunk Medieval city" - This should be two sentences. Maybe mention the setting alongside the name and the development/leak dates in a second sentence.
 * Also modify "steampunk Medieval" per SEAOFBLUE.
 * "two of the developers became tourism ambassadors" - Should it be mentioned which ones? Nate Fox has already been introduced in a prior history section.


 * Games developed
 * Is Ghost of Tsushima Director's Cut different enough to mention it as a separate game?


 * References
 * Ref #6 and #28 are the only ones to feature publishers. For consistency, I would remove it here too or add them to all others.
 * Ref #6 also has "IGN staff" as its author. This is redundant; if the author is unknown, leave the field blank.
 * Ref #7: Sam Reilly -> Jim Reilly.
 * Ref #8 should feature proper author and publisher values; YouTube should be in via. Also, given that it is only used once, consider adding the time at which the relevant segment appears.
 * In ref #9 and ref #11, Metacritic should be the website.
 * Ref #13: Ben Hansen -> Ben Hanson.
 * On ref #21, "MCVUK" should either be MCV (the former name) or MCV/Develop (the current name). The author appears to be Will Freeman.
 * Ref #22: Samit Sarker -> Samit Sarkar.
 * Ref #27: Consider linking Video Games Chronicle.


 * Other
 * Categories should be alphabetized
 * Check for duplicate links; I recommend User:Evad37/duplinks-alt.

Above is my initial review. Feel free to strike through or reply to individual comments as you work on them. Regards, IceWelder  &#91; &#9993; &#93; 14:59, 21 August 2022 (UTC)
 * - Thanks for the review. I think I have implemented most of the changes. OceanHok (talk) 13:22, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Nice work! I made a few fixes that were faster done than spelled out to quickly push the article through; feel free to revert parts you disagree with. . IceWelder  &#91; &#9993; &#93; 15:09, 22 August 2022 (UTC)