Talk:Sumie Tanaka

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This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Tessadfr. Peer reviewers: BeeHime, Mich mi, Kay2416.

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Hello Tessadfr. I think that your article was interesting. I would like to mention that what I am assuming is Tanaka's name in Japanese characters is a nice touch. There are just a couple of suggestions I will give you to maybe help you improve your article more.


 * Make sure to reread your page again. I see some grammatical errors that can be easily fixed.


 * I do not know if it is because you were not able to find more information to elaborate on certain topics however, if you do have more facts I would include more. It looks like you have a lot of information so I am assuming you can, such as elaborating more when she worked for the Bungakuza. Why she decided to be baptized Catholic, etc.

Other than that good job! --Kay2416 (talk) 23:43, 22 March 2016 (UTC)

Peer Review BeeHime
Hi Tessadfr! I just checked your draft for the Sumie Tanaka article at Draft:Sumie Tanaka. Here are some of my comments (I already posted this peer review on your username Talk page :) ):

I like the way you organized your information, the structure and order make sense. However, because the citations have not been included yet, it's difficult for me to link the information with where they come from at this point. You seem to have a good balance between academic and non-academic sources from what I can see, but there are a few of them that I'm not sure are reliable enough for a Wikipedia article:

http://celebrities.wiki/celebrity/sumie-tanaka http://www.jpf.go.jp/e/project/culture/archive/domestic/movie/fsp8-2.html http://www.artistdirect.com/nad/store/movies/principal/0,,2176877,00.html http://www.allcinema.net/prog/award_top.php?num_a=41 http://mydramalist.info/person/32459/tanaka_sumie

It depends on which type of information you are pulling out of these texts, but if you already have access to these information in another one, then I don't think they are necessary.

In the Bungakuza Theatre section, there is a double "the" at some point, you could write "based on her own experience", and use "work" instead of plays to avoid repetition.

In the Career section, you could add the link to the Cinema of Japan wiki page for the Golden Age, so that people can know more about Japanese Cinema's history. You can also add a link to the Mikio Naruse page, and right after her name the name of Kinuyo Tanaka seems out of place.

Also, just to note, at some points the first name and last name of directors or actresses are switched around. It's better to choose and stick to one writing form, either the Western form with First name and then Last name, or the original Japanese form with Last Name followed by First Name.

I will keep you posted if I find some additional information that you could use for your page while doing my own research! BeeHime (talk) 18:06, 26 March 2016 (UTC)