Talk:Super Bowl commercials/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 13:36, 21 April 2021 (UTC)

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:36, 21 April 2021 (UTC)

General comments

 * See MOS:'S.
 * Lead section looks good.
 * In #Benefits: "The popularity [...] have also" "The popularity [...] has also"
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 14:56, 29 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Is the usage of "US$" and "USD" necessary for this article? (found in #Cost)
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 14:56, 29 April 2021 (UTC)
 * "In order to" "To"
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 14:56, 29 April 2021 (UTC)
 * This should be changed for all uses to avoid wordy sentences.
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 14:44, 13 May 2021 (UTC)


 * "A number of" "Several"
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 14:56, 29 April 2021 (UTC)
 * This should also be changed for all uses.
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 14:46, 13 May 2021 (UTC)


 * "all-time" "all time" (change all uses)
 * ✅ Fixed all except for the first reference, where the usage of the hyphen is appropriate since it is an adjective of the word "viewership" and comes before the word. JParksT2023 (talk) 14:56, 29 April 2021 (UTC)
 * "ad equated" "adequated"
 * ✅ "ad equated" made sense in the context but was a little unclear, so I changed the phrasing to "The narration of the ad likened the emergence from the crisis to the second half of a football game[...]" (emphasis added) JParksT2023 (talk) 15:10, 29 April 2021 (UTC)
 * In #Local_advertising, try avoiding the repetitive "In [year], [event]".
 * ✅ Removed three out of the six usages JParksT2023 (talk) 15:16, 29 April 2021 (UTC)
 * The phrase "only of the" doesn't sound right.
 * ✅ Removed "of" JParksT2023 (talk) 15:34, 29 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Remove the comma after "abortion or Christianity".
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 15:34, 29 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Add a serial comma after "MoveOn.org".
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 15:34, 29 April 2021 (UTC)
 * "sponsor the NFL" "sponsor of the NFL"
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 15:34, 29 April 2021 (UTC)
 * References
 * adage.com Ad Age
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 15:34, 29 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Deadline Deadline Hollywood
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 15:34, 29 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Forbes.com Forbes
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 15:34, 29 April 2021 (UTC)
 * NYTimes.com The New York Times
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 15:34, 29 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Time.com Time
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 15:34, 29 April 2021 (UTC)
 * TV By The Numbers TV by the Numbers
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 13:06, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Wall Street Journal The Wall Street Journal
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 13:06, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Are publisher parameters needed if they are the same as the website?
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 15:02, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * The link to #22 might be dead (from Sports Business Journal).
 * ✅ Found correct link JParksT2023 (talk) 13:35, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Citations #41 and #42 do not currently exist ("invoked but never defined").
 * ✅ I just removed them, since I don't know what source was being used and there was already another source there. JParksT2023 (talk) 14:12, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Same issues for #49, #117, #196, #197, #198, #226, and #238.
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 14:12, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Citations #65, #73, #166, #208, #245, and #249 are missing their website parameters.
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 14:58, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * #128 is missing several parameters (date/author/access-date).
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 14:12, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * #153 has an error with its URL and citation.
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 15:04, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Properly cite #223 and #224.
 * Did you mean #222 and #223? #224 looks fine.
 * I think you removed a reference; now the numbers don't match but yes, #222 and #223.
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 15:02, 3 May 2021 (UTC)


 * New York Post is not reliable per WP:NYPOST (remove it).
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 15:43, 29 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Mark citations from Adweek / Advertising Age with "|url-access=subscription".
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 13:06, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Mark citations from Bloomberg with "|url-access=subscription".
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 13:06, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Mark citations from Chicago Tribune with "|url-access=limited".
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 13:06, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Mark citations from Financial Post with "|url-access=limited".
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 13:06, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Mark citations from Financial Times with "|url-access=subscription".
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 13:25, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Mark citations from Forbes with "|url-access=limited".
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 13:06, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Mark citations from Fortune with "|url-access=subscription".
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 13:25, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Mark citations from Los Angeles Times with "|url-access=limited".
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 13:25, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Mark citations from Rolling Stone with "|url-access=limited".
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 13:25, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Mark citations from San Francisco Chronicle with "|url-access=limited".
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 13:25, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Mark citations from Time with "|url-access=limited".
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 13:25, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Mark citations from The New York Times with "|url-access=limited".
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 13:25, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Mark citations from The Wall Street Journal with "|url-access=subscription".
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 13:25, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Mark citations from Vanity Fair with "|url-access=limited".
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 13:25, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Mark citations from Washington Post with "|url-access=limited".
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 13:25, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Don't use the "Archived [...] at the Wayback Machine" template.
 * Where is this used?
 * Currently at #19, #21, #22, #108, #110, and #152.
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 14:55, 6 May 2021 (UTC)


 * Also replace the "(subscription required)" template for "|url-access=subscription".
 * Where is this used?
 * Reference #155.
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 14:55, 6 May 2021 (UTC)


 * Mark citations from Sports Business Journal with "|url-access=registration".
 * ✅ JParksT2023 (talk) 14:55, 6 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Archive references (might have to do it manually).