Talk:Super Mario Galaxy/GA3

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 15:09, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

I will review this. MWright96 (talk) 15:09, 29 August 2016 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Premise and setting

 * Celestial Object, Gravitional force and Wii Message Board are dab links
 * Fixed. JAG  UAR   18:44, 29 August 2016 (UTC)
 * "that provide access to the forty-two galaxies available in the game" - forty-two should be in number form for consistency
 * Good catch. JAG  UAR   18:44, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

Controls

 * Ice skating is a dab link
 * Fixed. JAG  UAR   18:44, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

Power-ups and lives

 * Health meter and checkpoint are dab links
 * Fixed. JAG  UAR   18:44, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

Plot

 * Mushroom Kingdom is linked twice
 * Removed. JAG  UAR   18:44, 29 August 2016 (UTC)


 * Remove the outer space wikilink since its already in the gameplay section
 * Removed. JAG  UAR   18:44, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

Development

 * Remove both links to outer space
 * Done. JAG  UAR   18:46, 29 August 2016 (UTC)


 * " life meter to 3 from 8" - spell out 3 and 8
 * Done. JAG  UAR   18:46, 29 August 2016 (UTC)


 * "Miyamoto thought that it was too easy and lacked insensitivity, asserting that a game loses its excitement when it is made too easy." - reptition of too easy
 * Rephrased. JAG  UAR   18:46, 29 August 2016 (UTC)


 * "Shimizu also had a negative reaction to the idea. Shimizu" - usage of "Shimizu" in close proximity
 * Fixed. JAG  UAR   18:46, 29 August 2016 (UTC)


 * "Iwata noted that Mario's Bee Suit was popular with women, and also stated that Mario's other suits were designed to add variations to the gameplay." - the character would be better to avoid reptition
 * Done, thanks. JAG  UAR   18:46, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

Music

 * "Yokota almost quit his job," - quit is American style spelling
 * Yeah, perhaps. I've used "resigned" instead. JAG  UAR   18:49, 29 August 2016 (UTC)


 * "in contrast to the tropical sounds of Super Mario Bros.. " - remove the second full stop
 * Super Mario Bros. has a full stop in its title, so the full stop after the game is correct. You should have seen the fun I had with Nights into Dreams...! JAG  UAR   18:49, 29 August 2016 (UTC)

Reception

 * " stating that the control schemes more subtle and persuasive as opposed to the "vigorous literalism" of The Legend of Zelda: Twilight Princess." - missing "were"
 * Good catch! JAG  UAR   18:50, 29 August 2016 (UTC)