Talk:Supersize (album)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 10:57, 2 June 2022 (UTC)

Infobox

 * Fine

Lead

 * "Prior, David had primarily been a YouTuber" → She is still a Youtuber right? Because it seems like she gave up that career when reading this
 * She is no longer a YouTuber. She occasionally posts there, but she's considered a rapper now.


 * "on what observers categorized as pop rap and R&B songs" → observers? Who are these observers?
 * reworded.

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 * "It was certified platinum in Germany and Austria, and "On Off" also received gold in the aforementioned countries." → remove, this is already on the body of the article and it is just too much here.
 * Commercially, Supersize was successful → in German-speaking countries

Background and release
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 * "The following day, Universal Music Group released a CD for €17,99 and Vertigo Berlin issued a box set for €49,99" → The prices are irrelevant information. The following day, Universal Music Group released a CD and Vertigo Berlin issued a box set.
 * About the cover art, showing David → Regarding the cover art, which shows David

Music and lyrics
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 * pop rap and R&B → pop rap and R&B genres
 * and have her adopting the role → can you rephrase this?
 * talking about empowerment... → addressing themes of empowerment
 * An editor of VIP.de noticed lyrical connections between "Ice" and "Gib Ihm", calling the former a continuation of the latter. → this should be above, right after describing the tracks

Critical reception

 * Could you please put first the favorable reviews, then the average and ultimately the unfavorable ones?
 * I didn't do this because we literally have three reviews in total. Would we have around 1000 like in high-profile music articles, then this sort-out would be helpful, but here I think it is not.


 * Mix1 has too many little starts, put it only in the prose
 * I removed it overall, I came to the conclusion that this isn't too necessary.

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Promotion and commercial performance

 * "Gib Ihm" notably broke → "Gib Ihm" broke
 * at the Wireless Germany festival, but eventually cancelled the gig → but the gig was canceled + no reason was given?
 * Unfortunately no.

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 * was a commercial success → was a commercial success in German-speaking countries
 * German albums charts → wikilink
 * first one by a German solo female → first by a German solo female
 * and is also the first one by a → same as previous

Track listing
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 * Not sure about wikilink stuff to other wikis that are not the English one. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 12:17, 2 June 2022 (UTC)

Charts
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 * The "German Hip Hop Albums (Offizielle Top 100)" should redirect to GfK Entertainment hip hop albums chart.

Release history

 * Fine

Overall

 * Regarding the Deustch wikilinks, I was thinking something like this FNSHRS.. Of course, only wikilink once in the body of the article
 * I ended up removing all links overall. There's too much red if we do this, and it doesn't really look good.


 * Seven days. Let me know once you are done.
 * Thank you for your review! I have responded to some of your comments. Greets; Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:34, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Only missed two references. Everything else seems great, I will pass it after you fix those references if you are ok with that. Please let me know. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 21:39, 4 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Everything done. Cartoon network freak (talk) 06:29, 5 June 2022 (UTC)