Talk:Superstar (Marina song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 17:48, 29 July 2020 (UTC)

Reviewing one of your articles once again, this time I'll be going for one of the oldest songs nominees currently. --K. Peake 17:48, 29 July 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Remove hlist from the infobox
 * Remove venue parameter as that is only for live recordings
 * Link to the music video
 * "for her fourth studio album," → "from her fourth studio album,"
 * Swap order of writing and release sentences
 * Target single to Single (music)
 * "and produced by" → "while produced by"
 * "she demanded when creating the parent album." → "she demanded, lacking from her previous albums, when creating it."
 * Target ballad to Sentimental ballad
 * "that was compared often" → "that was often compared"
 * "its lyrics describe" → "the lyrics describe"
 * "received a generally mixed response" → "received generally mixed reviews"
 * "songwriting on the track was" → "lyrics for the song were"
 * "which divided critics." not enough reviews to make such a claim so remove it
 * "A music video featuring the" → "A music video for the" with the appropriate wikilink
 * "room and gives the impression" → "room, while giving the impression"
 * "was also included on the setlist to" → "was included on the setlist for"
 * This sentence should come directly before the first about the acoustic version

Background and release

 * "She explained that" → "She explained that,"
 * "After her announcement, she" → "After the announcement, Marina"
 * "her first new single under the name," → "her first single under the new name," with the appropriate target
 * "She also announced Love + Fear" → "She announced Love + Fear"
 * "and first under her new name." →"and first as Marina."
 * "The track listing for the project was revealed the same day," → "The track listing was revealed the same day,"
 * "composed of two acts" → "that is composed of two segments,"
 * "she specifically asked her label" → "that she specifically asked her record label Atlantic Records" with the wikilink
 * "She justified this request," → "She justified the request,"
 * "creative control in her" → "creative control for her"
 * "and did not this" → "and did not want this"
 * "and produced by" → "with production being handled by"
 * "Marina performed her vocals" → "Marina recorded her vocals" since it otherwise sounds like a live performance
 * "was sent to music distributors such as Amazon Music and Spotify for" → "was released for"
 * "on 1 March 2019 through Atlantic Records." → "in various countries on 1 March 2019 through Marina's record label."
 * "It was marketed as" → "It served as"
 * "A promotional CD single intended for radio airplay was distributed in" → "A promotional CD single, intended for radio airplay, was distributed throughout" with the targets
 * Remove wikilink on Benelux
 * "was also recorded and included on the track listing for" → "was later recorded and released as the fourth track on"

Composition and lyrics

 * "what the rest of the album" → "what the rest of Love + Fear"
 * "on Marina's second studio album," → "on Marina's second studio album"
 * "called the song" → "called the track"
 * "of a piano on the track." → "of a piano."
 * "According to the official sheet music published at Musicnotes.com," → "According to the sheet music at Musicnotes.com,"
 * "is set in common time and has" → "is set in the time signature of common time, and has"
 * Target key to Key (music)
 * "in the chord progressions of" → "in the chord progression of" with the wikilink
 * This sentence implies John Hanes engineered the song at MixStar Studios; is that correct or does it need rewording?
 * Remove wikilink on Virginia
 * "In an interview with Apple Music during" → "In an interview with Apple Music, during" with the wikilink
 * "agreed in calling it a love song, citing the lyric" → "also called it a love song and cited the line,"
 * "Following an instrumental introduction to" → "Following the instrumental intro to"
 * "begins the first verse singing:" → "begins the first verse by singing:"
 * "She alternates to" → "She alternates to,"
 * "during the second verse." → "at the beginning of the second verse."

Critical reception

 * "calling attention to its lyrics," → "calling attention to the lyrics,"
 * "Wass wrote a review of the single, where he highlighted the lyrics and" → "Wass highlighted the song's lyrics and its"
 * "her prior releases, and considered this combination" → "Marina's prior releases, and considered the combination"
 * "favorite part to be the lyric," → "favorite part to be the lyrics,"
 * "Peyton Thomas from Pitchfork called this same lyric" → "Peyton Thomas of Pitchfork called the same lyrics"
 * "some more from the song and considered" → "some more from the song, considering"
 * "The acoustic version of the song was" → "The acoustic version of "Superstar" was"
 * "Mike Nied from Idolator provided" → "Mike Nied of Idolator provided"

Promotion

 * Img looks good
 * Wikilink lyric video per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * "of Marina in a black dress" → "of Marina in a black dress while"
 * "was released on 1 March." → "was released on 1 March 2019."
 * "An official music video for the song" → "A music video for the acoustic version of the song" to be more specific
 * "account on 13 September 2019." → "channel on 13 September of that year."
 * "is the first of three released" → "was the first of three released"
 * "with her hair arranged" → "and her hair is arranged"
 * "was also included on the set list" → "was included on the set list"
 * "who reviewed Marina's show" → "reviewing Marina's show"
 * "it "didn’t" → "it "didn't"

Track listing

 * Digital download/promotional CD single/streaming → Digital download/streaming/promotional CD single

Credits and personnel

 * Writers should come first, followed by producers and add that credit before keys in the order

Release history

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION
 * Format → Format(s)
 * Distributor → Label(s)
 * Digital download and streaming should be separated with the targets
 * Centre the refs
 * Add the promotional CD single here

Final comments and verdict

 * and I am sorry about the delay in the review, I was a bit stressed out about some real life issues yesterday. --K. Peake 08:55, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
 * – no worries. I believe I addressed all of your comments through my editing. Please let me know if there is anything else I can do for this review. Thanks again, Carbrera (talk) 18:45, 7 August 2020 (UTC).
 * You did not add a caption to the release history table, also I did not mean to put the countries in brackets for the Amazon citations; fix these issues please. --K. Peake 08:38, 8 August 2020 (UTC)
 * – my apologies. I believe I took care of it now. Carbrera (talk) 17:50, 8 August 2020 (UTC).
 * Looks like you misinterpreted my statement; I meant that the Amazon refs stay the same apart from the countries in brackets being removed, while you fix the publisher so Amazon.com (UK) → Amazon.co.uk, for example. --K. Peake 20:16, 8 August 2020 (UTC)
 * – Sorry, what about now? Carbrera (talk) 00:59, 10 August 2020 (UTC).
 * Did some slight copy editing to fix the Amazon citations, but it looks fine now. --K. Peake 05:11, 10 August 2020 (UTC)