Talk:Susie Bootja Bootja Napaltjarri/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Beloved  Freak  16:18, 9 June 2010 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * Couple of issues, lead needs expanding
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1 dead link
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Another interesting article. I actually started reading a bit more about Australian Aboriginal kinship this time, and found it fascinating. Here are my thoughts:

Lead

 * As per WP:LEAD, lead section is not currently summarising the whole article.
 * OK, I finally think i got this done. hamiltonstone (talk) 11:19, 15 June 2010 (UTC)


 * Does artist need to be linked?
 * No. Done. hamiltonstone (talk) 22:47, 10 June 2010 (UTC)

Life

 * I think this opening sentence would be neater & slightly easier to read if it was done like Peggy Rockman Napaljarri, with a link to the notes section, giving the various year references. "Circa" already implies that it's not going to be exact, so I think it would be ok to just have one date there, and mention the other possibilities, with references, in the notes. What do you think?
 * Done. hamiltonstone (talk) 22:47, 10 June 2010 (UTC)


 * I notice "skin name" is linked on its second mention - is that intentional?
 * No it wasn't - fixed. hamiltonstone (talk) 22:47, 10 June 2010 (UTC)


 * Is there any information about her family or early life? I presume not because it's not mentioned, but anything more on that would be great if it comes to light anywhere.
 * Pretty sure i've squeezed the sources for all they are worth. hamiltonstone (talk) 22:47, 10 June 2010 (UTC)