Talk:Swan Song (song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 10:17, 17 July 2021 (UTC)

Coming tomorrow --K. Peake 10:17, 17 July 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Pipe Warner Bros to Warner Records in the infobox
 * "for the 2019 film" → "for the soundtrack of 2019 film"
 * "wrote the song with" → "co-wrote the song with"
 * "also composed the films soundtrack" → "also composed the soundtrack"
 * "the lead single from the film's soundtrack." → "the soundtrack's lead single."
 * Shouldn't you write electropop track in the lead for consistency?
 * I don't think it's placement in the lead really matters. I put it there just so the paragraphs don't look too overflowed. LOVI  33  04:30, 20 July 2021 (UTC)
 * I was referring to the term "song" being used instead of "track", but they are interchangeable so this doesn't really matter. --K. Peake 07:13, 20 July 2021 (UTC)

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 * "praised "Swan Song" for" → "praised the song for"
 * Mention the award after the above statement instead
 * "and reached the top 100 of" → "and also reached the top 50 of" cutting down the countries listed to these ones since top 100 is too many
 * "specifically with its" → "specifically with the"
 * "and eventually Alita. Lipa transforms into Alita" → "and eventually Alita, before Lipa transforms into her"
 * "complimented its sci-fi" → "complimented the video's sci-fi"
 * "as well as a remixes" → "and a remixes"

Background and development
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 * "a new film, Alita: Battle Angel, that" → "the new film Alita: Battle Angel, which"
 * Introduce Alita as being a character and pipe to Alita (Battle Angel Alita)
 * "would be perfect for the film" → "would be a perfect fit for Alita: Battle Angel"
 * "She was given" → "Lipa was given"
 * "synopsis to begin. The singer later got to see the film just prior" → "synopsis to begin, while she later got to see it prior"
 * "Lipa wrote the song with" → "Lipa wrote the song alongside"
 * "She found it" → "The singer found it"

Music and lyrics
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 * "ACT UP and" → "ACT UP, and" on the audio sample text
 * ""Swan Song" is" → "Musically, "Swan Song" is"
 * Shouldn't you write that it is composed in the time signature of time?
 * Pipe synths to Synthesizer
 * Pipe strings to String instrument
 * "as well as a mechanized," → "and a mechanized,"
 * "while the song builds up to the" → "while the sections progress to the" to be less repetitive
 * "Lipa's uses triumphant" → "Lipa uses triumphant"
 * Pipe ranging to Vocal range
 * "as well as how society always needs use their voices;" → "as well as how their voices always need to be used;"
 * "the groups motto" → "the group's motto" plus merge this with the following sentence since they are too short to be separate
 * "contradicts it's meaning." → "contradicts its meaning."

Release and promotion
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 * "would perform "Swan Song" for" → "would record "Swan Song" for" or something similar because otherwise it sounds like she performs it during the film
 * "The same month, the movie's trailer was released which featured a" → "Also in December 2018, the film's trailer was released, featuring"
 * "tv spot for the film." → "TV spot for Alita: Battle Angel."
 * "as the film soundtrack's lead single," → "as the lead single from the film's soundtrack,"
 * "On 28 January," → "On 28 January 2019,"
 * "and inspires one" → "and inspire one"
 * "The song was included as" → ""Swan Song" was included as" plus I don't think the comma is needed after release

Critical reception
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 * Retitle to Reception since you can merge with the one para commercial section below
 * "For The New York Times, Jon Pareles compared" → "Writing for The New York Times, Jon Pareles compared"
 * "as a "proper solo singles" instead" → "as a "proper" solo single instead"
 * "he said it" → "he said the song"
 * Uproxx should not be italicised
 * "named it "powerful"," → "named "Swang Song" a "powerful","
 * "easily be her next" → "easily be [Lipa's] next"
 * "praised "creative and" → "praised the "creative and"
 * "that "sparse where" → "that is "sparse where"

Commercial performance
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 * Make this the third para of the above section
 * "a peak of 24." → "a peak of number 24."
 * The charts after this are not in any numerical or geographical order; I would suggest doing the latter with European countries first, then American, then Oceanic
 * "on the Bubbling Under Hot 100 Singles" →"on the Billboard Bubbling Under Hot 100 Singles" with the pipes
 * "of 24 and 27." → "of numbers 24 and 27."
 * Mention that the certification was for those units in Poland

Music video
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 * Img looks good!
 * "the video as different to" → "the video as different from"
 * Pipe CGI to Computer-generated imagery
 * "people from the movie" → "people from Alita: Battle Angel"
 * "The only time Lipa had" in what way? Please specify...
 * "was a powerful story" → "is a powerful story"
 * "her power. The director wanted to play with that notion" → "her power, a notion the director wanted to play with"
 * Shouldn't the synopsis and blockbuster part be the last sentence of the first para instead?
 * "and her crew rummages" → "and her crew rummaging"
 * "mountains of trash looking" → "mountains of trash, looking" for the correct link
 * "performs a martial arts" → "performs a martial arts inspired"
 * "into the air posing in" → "into the air, posing in"
 * "thought it is" → "thought it marked"
 * "Nied called it" → "Nied called the music video"

Track listings

 * Good

Credits and personnel

 * Good

Weekly charts

 * Why is the Czech Republic radio chart here when you already have the singles one?
 * Removed. LOVI  33  04:50, 20 July 2021 (UTC)

Year-end charts

 * Good

Certification

 * Good

Release history
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 * Format → Format(s)
 * Pipe Adult contemporary radio to Adult contemporary music

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 21:12, 18 July 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review ! I have addressed all your comments. Let me know if anything else needs to be done. LOVI  33  04:56, 20 July 2021 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, decent response time! --K. Peake 07:13, 20 July 2021 (UTC)